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When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Sep 29th, '10, 23:39

Not ilovebender.com's sh*t OR My Apathy, this thread is going to be more me.

I'd sell my soul for nine ninety five on
eBay!
get what I say
got what I said
don't mind
I'm outter mine
anyway don't take every lyrical sh*t I make seriously, I'm serious G, I'm really not mad unless
I tell ya, G, and most of those times, anybody, it's been me flexing, said testing my
ability to see what I write when I write just listening to me
this voice in my head flowing oh'so lyrically, my mind and what you read
... that one of course
was past tense
"Red!"
I'm like scienetolgy I just gotta be
specifically strict and pick legitiously, not relgiously, with every piece of sh*t yall read
from I-L-B
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby Weather Man » Sep 30th, '10, 00:52

This needs more work, I have no idea what your saying and it keeps like you rushed through this in my opinion. I think if you took your time on this it would have been better then it is.
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 1st, '10, 06:53

get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I test you
to get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
don't be rude
get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I get to
say get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
ya get me?
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 2nd, '10, 02:37

I'd preach this
you son of a bitch
I'll preach that
you hood rat

:laughing:
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 2nd, '10, 03:26

Living in the city
with the shit all near me
do my garden
and police dog
runs in near me
men run down my sewer so police copters persue er'
living in the city
with the shit nitty gritty
bunch of ass girls looking fine
young, and pretty, I
don't care if she's black this that or hindi
I've fucked her said
thank fuck I'm
from the city
not Westbridge
or Point Blank
or somewhere
in Mississippi
but South London
from West-
minster to the
back streets
of Thornton
Heath!
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 2nd, '10, 05:14

ilovebender.com wrote:Living in the city
with the shit all near me
do my garden
and police dog
runs in near me
men run down my sewer so police copters persue er'
living in the city
with the shit nitty gritty
bunch of ass girls looking fine
young, and pretty, I
don't care if she's black this that or hindi
I've fucked her said
thank fuck I'm
from the city
not Westbridge
or Point Blank
or somewhere
in Mississippi
but South London
from West-
minster to the
back streets
of Thornton
Heath!


Living in the city with the shit all near me do my garden and police dog runs in near me men run down my sewer so police copters persue er' living in the city with the shit nitty gritty bunch of ass girls looking fine young, and pretty, I don't care if she's black this that or hindi I've fucked her said thank fuck I'm from the city not Westbridge or Point Blank or somewhere in Mississippi but South London from West-
minster to the back streets of Thornton Heath! :D :whistle:
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 3rd, '10, 15:18

Thank God
for my sight
Thank God
I can write
Thank God
I can hear
Thank God
you are near
Thank God
I am here and for my life
Thank God
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 31st, '10, 05:10

ilovebender.com wrote:get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I test you
to get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
don't be rude
get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I get to
say get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
ya get me?


get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I test you
to get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
don't get rude
get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
I get to
say get me
get me
I get you
get me
get me
ya get me?

A quick re-write :8) :happy:
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby Mr. Chambers » Nov 1st, '10, 20:08

link of feedback?
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Nov 2nd, '10, 02:55

In my defense, the only thing that was written in here after I became aware of that rule was that re-write of Get Me just there.

Here's my latest feed that I was saving for a new piece, but it mayaswell go here, now that you mention it Chambers.

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=101207&p=1390678#p1390678
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby classthe_king » Nov 2nd, '10, 02:59

It shouldn't be about saving up feed for when you post. You should try and feed as normal and then when you make a post go out of your way to feed someone maybe you don't always feed and try to give them so good, constructive feed.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Nov 2nd, '10, 03:08

With my feeds, I've fed, before, just out of wanting to see what others have written... but the Majority of the time, I have to admit, is when I've got something ready to post.
When ever I feed though, I'd like to think that I keep an open mind with other people's works and try to give the most honest and helpful feed back that I can.
Although, to be honest, I would have maybe done with that feed I saved because, I used it, then hated the lyrics, so I deleted the thread, so I had this one in the bank lol, I would have maybe done what I done with W double E D, which as you can see has two Links of Feed. That was the only other case where I actually saved a feed, and the fact that I saved it was just because, 'W double E D' was inspired by what I fed, and I fed it, then user posted, then I said in what I fed after my feed and what the user said, that I will write my own song about weed because of that, and I did, and I always wanted my feed from that, to be the feed for what I was going to write...
Since I didn't do that for a while, I decided I needed a fresh new feed, and the other one was the unused one that I wanted to use on what I wrote. :whistle: :happy:
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby classthe_king » Nov 2nd, '10, 03:40

Touche
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby Mr. Chambers » Nov 2nd, '10, 05:19

ilovebender.com wrote:With my feeds, I've fed, before, just out of wanting to see what others have written... but the Majority of the time, I have to admit, is when I've got something ready to post.
When ever I feed though, I'd like to think that I keep an open mind with other people's works and try to give the most honest and helpful feed back that I can.
Although, to be honest, I would have maybe done with that feed I saved because, I used it, then hated the lyrics, so I deleted the thread, so I had this one in the bank lol, I would have maybe done what I done with W double E D, which as you can see has two Links of Feed. That was the only other case where I actually saved a feed, and the fact that I saved it was just because, 'W double E D' was inspired by what I fed, and I fed it, then user posted, then I said in what I fed after my feed and what the user said, that I will write my own song about weed because of that, and I did, and I always wanted my feed from that, to be the feed for what I was going to write...
Since I didn't do that for a while, I decided I needed a fresh new feed, and the other one was the unused one that I wanted to use on what I wrote. :whistle: :happy:

you write more defending your methods then actually executing good methods..........


just sayin....
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Re: When Inspiration Hits

Postby ilovebender.com » Nov 2nd, '10, 05:27

If you mean lyrically, I like my methods, just saying.
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