If You Cry...

[ThomasJ]

BEAT

What's reality? Why are we here?
If we're only on this Earth to suffer and fear
I try to hear,but it's like I got plugs in my ears
And silence overpowers even the loudest of cheers
Evil has clogged my window,and I give it my best but
I could only see glimpses of my own reflection
I fall deeper and deeper into the limitless abyss
Knowing there's no one to give me a hand,hug or a kiss
My being is vanishing,I already smell the stench
Of people who's eternity is in hell to spend
What a lovely meal I'm cooking up,ain't it man?
My taste buds getting used to me being Satan's Chef
Feeling feeble,death sentence without killing people
Guess it all was the result of me not feeling equal
I'm really see through,nothing of me to see,true
About to give in to this needle...

I don't write anymore really,so whatever...

FEEDBACK

[DƎRDYPK]

I don't write anymore really,so whatever...

I don't leave feed really so whatever






























NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo
forrealz though if you don't write that much...
that's pretty good for not writing much
I mean I didn't read/rap it to the beat
but I started reading & damn son...
you should be writing more
you got that poetical style of writing going on & I like it
this was sick but....WRITE MORE

[Devil'sAdvocate]

This is dope man

[MakaveliTheDon]

This is poetic to the core. Reminds me of Nas, I don't know why it just does. I liked the question parts at the beginning...nice concept

The ain't it man/Satan's chef rhyme kinda bothered me but that's about it.

Sad to see you don't write that much anymore. My advice is to keep on writing, man you got some potential and talent

[Just Silver]

Seems like a song could be made

Honestly i thought it was decent but could be better 7.7/10

Especially this line

"Evil has clogged my window,and I give it my best but
I could only see glimpses of my own reflection"

It had great imagery but idk how it rhymed

[ThomasJ]

Thanks for the feed guys...
Nah,I don't think I'll write anything anytime soon...

Anyway,appreciate y'all checking it out

[pfati]

It's dope,, and poetry does not always have to rhyme,,, but i guess you sorta gotta be consistent through the poem..... u dont HAVE to i guess, but it's all about creativity

[classthe_king]

Seems like a song could be made

Honestly i thought it was decent but could be better 7.7/10

Especially this line

"Evil has clogged my window,and I give it my best but
I could only see glimpses of my own reflection"

It had great imagery but idk how it rhymed

He pronounced it Reflect-un

[ThomasJ]

Seems like a song could be made

Honestly i thought it was decent but could be better 7.7/10

Especially this line

"Evil has clogged my window,and I give it my best but
I could only see glimpses of my own reflection"

It had great imagery but idk how it rhymed

He pronounced it Reflect-un

Nah,I pronounced but as bt LOL

[Just Silver]

Now that i look back i was a little harsh this shits better than I said

I'd at least rate it an 8 or 9

[ThomasJ]

Thanks guys.