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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby classthe_king » Nov 3rd, '10, 23:06

It was good until it stopped rhyming halfway through
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby classthe_king » Nov 3rd, '10, 23:18

-Steven- wrote:Hearing sirens in the distance ya friends scarperd,
I walked away too feeling heartless,
Very next day i recieve a text, Apparently
Xrays showed i was lucky to not have broke your neck!,
And the whole moral of this story is,
Solving things with words makes you a man,
Solving things with fists makes you a bitch.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby DƎRDYPK » Nov 3rd, '10, 23:37

word bro I like it :y:
I see a big improvement in your writtens :worship:
stay based & Keep practicing wit them freestyles & keystyles :b:
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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby Block » Nov 4th, '10, 04:04

you keep elevating, man.. Good shit. Not complex at all but the story is perfect and well told.

This also seems to flow better than most text.
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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby B.A.D. » Nov 4th, '10, 10:56

:o
the flow on the first half of the verse fits 100% my most common style of flow.

nigga, practice on the mic!!!!
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Re: Wow, this is actually really personal and important.

Postby Mr. Chambers » Nov 4th, '10, 19:20

hey link-o-feedback?
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so much WIN!
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