Quick verse

[BILI]

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My raps are back,so you`re gettin fucked without the foreplay
Sick mind can only think of 4 ways to kill you before play
I`ll beat you over the internet till your avatar turns blue
Shit,I`m just warming up and it already concerns you
I`ll crush your lucky charms,till you scream:"he`s a cereal killer"
Torment you till you see real thriller,aint nobody iller
So bitch go play with the kids and just leave the mic
Oh,its great White,so better belive the hype
Just say bye quick,10 minutes later I`m screaming c`mon die prick
See,Its not like I only go hard when your bitch is on my dick
Fuck Hulk,give me the Abomination,I`m ready for the blackhouse
If ya`ll want some white,go to crackhouse.
Of course I went to high school,everday high in shcool
Thought it was cool,now I`m just another dyin fool
I`m back whit new rhymes,sicker lines,they need healing
Shit,I have this weird feeling,that my skin is peeling

Just did something for the sake of it,stay tuned for based series

[Innovation]

Good verse. It had some good highlights. I like your use of multis, too.

I like the opening bar, I thought it was a good play on words.

Some parts weren't good though..

I`ll crush your lucky charms,till you scream:"he`s a cereal killer"

I get the concept but it's not very original. Also, the main "lucky charm" concept wasn't actually played on, you just went onto the pun.

Of course I went to high school,everday high in shcool
Thought it was cool,now I`m just another dyin fool

One of the weakest bars in the verse, imo.

Overall it was a good verse, keep it up.

[BILI]

Thx alot man for honest feedback
I`m just trying to get the rust off since the last thing I wrote was few months ago.So now I`ll do these quick verses till I get in shape.

[classthe_king]

Glad to see you back at it

[BILI]

Honestly bro, i thought you flowed realllly well, but i thought the punches were not up to your usual standard, i think you should try a story telling peice to get your practice up and stuff. your flow is very much there and you got the lyrics on lock but the subject matter wasnt very appealing.

Story telling peice! NAOW.


hit me up on inbox if you wanna do another collab bruh

Thx man

And yeah,I`ll hit you up,if you got something intresting hit me.okkk?

@Sentus,word dawg
We need to collab son

[classthe_king]

Honestly bro, i thought you flowed realllly well, but i thought the punches were not up to your usual standard, i think you should try a story telling peice to get your practice up and stuff. your flow is very much there and you got the lyrics on lock but the subject matter wasnt very appealing.

Story telling peice! NAOW.


hit me up on inbox if you wanna do another collab bruh

Thx man

And yeah,I`ll hit you up,if you got something intresting hit me.okkk?

@Sentus,word dawg
We need to collab son

Well I got an extra verse cause Yah-Hah is being a fuck. So I can give you a verse.

[BILI]

Pass it niqqa

[classthe_king]

Pass it niqqa

Get me you and Steve