Some raps of mine, input wanted :0

[NeverStop123]

im just a lyrical assasion with a passion for flashin cheques, after its cashed-in,
like obama and aladin love child called osama ben laden.
like titties in satin, temptations because my mind is haunted by satan,
im still waiting, for his next orders, give me the main course, **** the orderves,
what a sensation. if been to 5 shrinks, beacuse i thinks i like when they said something about being clinically insane and manically depressed, not to mention possessed by an 150 year old with an obsession of incest and diagnosed with turrets, or so i'm told, the preist shouldn't be told of my sessions, please forgive my confessions, squeeze my weapons, not a gun, but the blade end of my knife, the devil said that i'd be a slave for life..twice.


Initation? Im racin Jason to the television station
5 Murders and my vision is gettin wasted
9 Burgers and im wishin my blood she'd be tastin
Tie her up, turn her around so my d1ck she be facin
Rise up slut, my dick travels faster than the speed of sound
greedy as I pound. No need for fakin once i set the pace in i'll leave you more shaken
than clay aiken when i told him i was taken and sold him some arm and hammer bakin
soda, i'm as wise as yoda, surprise are my skills at yoga, and killin at parties ala toga


I am the greatest rapper to ever come out of the misc
Bitches think im clever while in bj i pull out my dick and piss
Snitches actin like they better but I am just sick of this
Countin reps like arithmetic, countin whips while I smack your bish
Why I smell fish, High I am as I write this, I am not a spratan
But I will throw knives and kick while im fartin.
Call me out on my stats you wack
I've heard of hairy women who warm up with weights higher than that
Marry her covered in semen and have a baby crazier than slim shady when Kim popped and named it Hailey.

[ilovebender.com]

im just a lyrical assasion with a passion for flashin cheques, after its cashed-in,
like obama and aladin love child called osama ben laden.
like titties in satin, temptations because my mind is haunted by satin,
im still waiting, for his next orders, give me the main course, **** the orderves,
what a sensation. if been to 5 shrinks, beacuse i thinks i like when they said something about being clinically insane and manically depressed, not to mention possessed by an 150 year old with an obsession of incest and diagnosed with turrets, or so i'm told, the preist shouldn't be told of my sessions, please forgive my confessions, squeeze my weapons, not a gun, but the blade end of my knife, the devil said that i'd be a slave for life..twice.


Initation? Im racin Jason to the television station
5 Murders and my vision is gettin wasted
9 Burgers and im wishin my blood she'd be tastin
Tie her up, turn her around so my d1ck she be facin
Rise up slut, my dick travels faster than the speed of sound
greedy as I pound. No need for fakin once i set the pace in i'll leave you more shaken
than clay aiken when i told him i was taken and sold him some arm and hammer bakin
soda, i'm as wise as yoda, surprise are my skills at yoga, and killin at parties ala toga


I am the greatest rapper to ever come out of the misc
Bitches think im clever while in bj i pull out my dick and piss
Snitches actin like they better but I am just sick of this
Countin reps like arithmetic, countin whips while I smack your bish
Why I smell fish, High I am as I write this, I am not a spratan
But I will throw knives and kick while im fartin.
Call me out on my stats you wack
I've heard of hairy women who warm up with weights higher than that
Marry her covered in semen and have a baby crazier than slim shady when Kim popped and named in Hailey.

damn it, because I need one I'm doing this but, you need a link of feed.


You had a lot to read but since I thought this was written by a crazy man, I actually read on, very good.

[NeverStop123]

Yeah im pretty twisted and crazy

Edit: which rap did you like the most?

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[gutawafang]

canibus style. but i dont like cuz it lacks relevance dawg. structure is a turnoff. flow is quite okay.

[NeverStop123]

canibus style. but i dont like cuz it lacks relevance dawg. structure is a turnoff. flow is quite okay.

So your saying that theres some definite skill?, thats what I want to know.they are more freestyles off the brain than structured pieces of work that would take me a longer time to come up with.

[gutawafang]

canibus style. but i dont like cuz it lacks relevance dawg. structure is a turnoff. flow is quite okay.

So your saying that theres some definite skill?, thats what I want to know.they are more freestyles off the brain than structured pieces of work that would take me a longer time to come up with.

I mean, the multis and all is pretty good but since it's a keystyle, props man.

[NeverStop123]

canibus style. but i dont like cuz it lacks relevance dawg. structure is a turnoff. flow is quite okay.

So your saying that theres some definite skill?, thats what I want to know.they are more freestyles off the brain than structured pieces of work that would take me a longer time to come up with.

I mean, the multis and all is pretty good but since it's a keystyle, props man.

keystyle?

[gutawafang]

It's not an audio so it's a keystyle since you type on keyboard.

[NeverStop123]

It's not an audio so it's a keystyle since you type on keyboard.

id make a sick ghostwriter, for some reason I can say it all in my head clear, but when it comes from my mouth to other ears, i mess up and i confess that it sounds all queer.

[gutawafang]

It's not an audio so it's a keystyle since you type on keyboard.

id make a sick ghostwriter, for some reason I can say it all in my head clear, but when it comes from my mouth to other ears, i mess up and i confess that it sounds all queer.

Fuck yeah? Fuck yeah!

[NeverStop123]

Vocal chords get tighter than under water snorkel wars, something like that could've came after ghostwriter.

Im not much of a battle guy because I'm not so good at punchlines and disses.

[WakeUpShow]

pretty good, but alot of lines seemed random

[classthe_king]

You deffinitely have a lot of talent and potential. Really need to work on that flow and structure though, lines were way too long.

[ilovebender.com]

Yeah im pretty twisted and crazy

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I thought it was all one piece.

not to mention possessed by an 150 year old with an obsession of incest... that was pretty sick lol
but it's an attention grabber.

Rise up slut, my dick travels faster than the speed of sound, LOL
and then sorta smooth with the No need for fakin & I'll leave you more shaken, that was cool.

you had me at the word misc right there, miscellaneous & misc are both words and terms I use, so to that right there and even though I thought it was a lot to read, I like the complexity of the lyrics in the on going barrage of lyrical flow that... made it sort of a chor for me, but, it was cool when it was over... and now I get that it wasn't one big rant lol.

[NeverStop123]

Yeah im pretty twisted and crazy

Edit: which rap did you like the most?

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I thought it was all one piece.

not to mention possessed by an 150 year old with an obsession of incest... that was pretty sick lol
but it's an attention grabber.

Rise up slut, my dick travels faster than the speed of sound, LOL
and then sorta smooth with the No need for fakin & I'll leave you more shaken, that was cool.

you had me at the word misc right there, miscellaneous & misc are both words and terms I use, so to that right there and even though I thought it was a lot to read, I like the complexity of the lyrics in the on going barrage of lyrical flow that... made it sort of a chor for me, but, it was cool when it was over... and now I get that it wasn't one big rant lol.

I can rap about the most sickminded things and keep a straight face. Nah they are all three seperate freestyles spaced apart. If it was one song it would be completely random F*ck job. I think I can easily work flow and structure while shortening lines if I put effort into it.

Thanks guys.