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Multi attempt

Postby Mahmoud48 » Nov 14th, '10, 00:00

Feedbk http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=101917&p=1404104#p1404104

i feel that the flow isnt on point

these insult never phase me
the impulse just makes me crazy
I consult but they never listen
adults just wanna label me
a mass halt and putting haters in submission
its my fault that there dying like an exhibition
of mass murdering by a murder who was never recognized
ppl say i got the eyes of a physco who wants to get televised
maybe thats true, to few but i rather lurk underground
i wanna take ur body and dump it in a reservoir
im more alien then a predator
and these metaphors are oozing outta my pores
like its second nature, im a major danger
ODD FUTURE ASAP OVOXO BLACK HIPPY GOOD MUSIC
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Re: Multi attempt

Postby Mahmoud48 » Nov 15th, '10, 00:40

bumb :coffee:
ODD FUTURE ASAP OVOXO BLACK HIPPY GOOD MUSIC
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Re: Multi attempt

Postby Sir_Machete' » Nov 18th, '10, 07:11

first time doing multies?? if so... not bad a little drop bro
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Re: Multi attempt

Postby BILI » Nov 19th, '10, 00:56

Sir_Machete' wrote:first time doing multies?? if so... not bad a little drop bro

agree

If this was your first try,then its more then decent.Just practice and you`ll get there
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