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Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 15th, '10, 23:56

I think this is my 1st ever storytelling piece. But, I wanted to make this funny with a little surprise at the end :y:

Hey, are you now sleepy?, I don't wanna sound creepy,
But, my frown's needy of a smile from my wild peepy,
Around, keep me please cause I can astound deeply,
You hear this god?, I will never let this gal leave me,
The word's from a jerk about to rape another woman,
Before sex she says she wants the rubber summoned,
He refuses, she bitches, she feels a sudden something,
Off guard so her butt's, fucked, the sucker's cumming!,
Penis attached to ass and to me it's nothing stunning,
They're so stuck together that he can fuck her running,
I sit back, crack up and make this my Twitter status,
"damn rofl man I'm seeing one of the sickest raptures",
She's tied up so I light her up into a fucking fried slut,
My face lights up, he crys up and asks why I struck,
And you may ask how I can see this or how I know this,
Well, let it be known that I'm god bitch! take notice,

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Re: Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 16th, '10, 02:48

bump :whistle:
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 16th, '10, 03:06

Thanks a lot Revolutionary :happy:
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 17th, '10, 01:27

Slim's Shady wrote:bump :whistle:
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Sir_Machete' » Nov 17th, '10, 01:45

Lol okay i've read it over again, best to give you proper breakdown to me it wasn't your best bro but hell is 2nd for me. Multies n flow were good. Imagery of the story you were saying was comic but insane as well :y:
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 18th, '10, 02:14

Thanks and I'm glad you liked it Machete :D

I thought this was my best one smh :'(
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Sir_Machete' » Nov 18th, '10, 06:53

i was very stoned last night bro so i gave a proper breakdown now. Def deserved it :y:
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Re: Bow Down

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 19th, '10, 01:02

Thanks for the breakdown my man :worship:
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