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Don't Push Me

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Don't Push Me

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 24th, '10, 02:36

Another verse after quite a while. Enjoy :b:

Instrumental: http://www.shadowville.com/1115/genres/ ... nt-push-me

A normal day in your life will usually not be deadly,
Well, as long as you push anyone around except me,
I'll tell you in your face directly, I was not bred week,
Bring your white shirt to fight, I'll make it a red tee,
I'm saying that when I sleep I blow steam off my brain,
Inhumane pain is gained as my dreams stock insane,
Untamed thoughts, my veins dark, red as they pop,
Hey doc!, I don't need therapy, I rather stay locked,
In a great spot like right now, where my gray heart,
Wants to be layed shot, killed like they slayed Pac,
Man I'm never in the mood like Joey's biggest hater,
That's why I cut my veins, it's time to git the stapler,
So you wanna try to hurt me, even kill me? go ahead,
But, if you fail to kill, prepare for the slowest death,
What, I was a nice guy?, thought you might slide?,
Did you imagine yourself getting a damn high-five?,


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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 24th, '10, 13:20

damn man this aint bad...perfect sructure, the flow was damn near flawless for me...good drop, maybe work on the content/concept and lyrics (not multis) just vocabulary....good drop though...you new to Creative Writing?
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 24th, '10, 18:56

Thanks Fa-Q, and I'm not new to writing (7 months) but kinda new to the CW section.
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 25th, '10, 00:58

bumping.
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Sir_Machete' » Nov 25th, '10, 11:01

Structure flow/multies were all on point here bro. digging the concept here too sick stuff, you keep coming with constant drops :y:
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 25th, '10, 19:39

Thanks bro :happy:
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby WakeUpShow » Nov 25th, '10, 20:18

good flow, i liked the line about Joey/mood.
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Re: Don't Push Me

Postby Slim's Shady » Nov 25th, '10, 20:24

Haha, thanks and I love that line too :y:
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