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S a double J

Postby Xray » Oct 30th, '10, 08:14

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    I feel so fuckin lonely
    it's like my life ran from me
    If only you would kill me
    cause only you can heal me
    Devil I love you give me
    your soul your heart your energy
    Temper I need you daily
    You make my life so easy

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    Im like a horoscope givin people sick dreams
    They call it deathstroke way I kill these sixteens
    Im fulla trouble though in your fuckin wet jeans
    Plus these bitches know how they fuckin get creamed
    Give you comatose, blows on your dead clothes
    Bustin on your eye holes bigger than a stadium
    I hold you close and choke your throat with opium
    Play wid dem, rapin' em, you faggot like napoleon
    Addressin like a podium, throwin fingers like Eminem
    Makin disses with sodium, my insult bury many men
    You can't temper with hell when heaven breaks you
    Throw you in the world and you still gettin burned through
    I'm Aries ramming through emcees
    Your flow ass like you just ate baked beans
    Sajjad motherfucker leaving you with questions
    And if you want it motherfucker come and test him
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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: S a double J

Postby classthe_king » Oct 30th, '10, 15:44

This was pretty sick man. The only line I didn't really get was the dead clothes line because it didn't really rhyme with anything so it just stood out for me and sounded weird. But other than that everything sounded dope, another dope song for your highly anticipated tape :worship:
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Re: S a double J

Postby Just Silver » Oct 31st, '10, 02:04

Sick flow im :b: and its sick
9/10
keep up this type'a shit :y: :happy:
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Re: S a double J

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Nov 7th, '10, 18:36

DOPE AS FUCK
The devil ain't on a level same as him!
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Re: S a double J

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 20th, '10, 12:18

Aiyo just seen this, sorry!
This is tite man, flow is dope! like usually youre shit doesnt flow on paper, but i can hear you do dat shit in my mind man!
Lyrics were random, i dunno what the topic was about but its TYPICAL sajjad
LMAO!
Good shit
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Re: S a double J

Postby Audi » Nov 29th, '10, 13:23

Im like a horoscope givin people sick dreams
Horoscopes don't give people sick dreams
They call it deathstroke way I kill these sixteens
Sacrificed a set up for a weak punch
Im fulla trouble though in your fuckin wet jeans
I don't even wear jeans
Plus these bitches know how they fuckin get creamed
How?
Give you comatose, blows on your dead clothes
You can put me in comatose, can't really give me one.
My clothes are dead? I need some live ones ASAP

Bustin on your eye holes bigger than a stadium
That doesn't even make sense
I hold you close and choke your throat with opium
Akward
Play wid dem, rapin' em, you faggot like napoleon
Napoleon wasn't a faggot
Addressin like a podium, throwin fingers like Eminem
Weakness
Makin disses with sodium, my insult bury many men
Nonsensical.
You can't temper with hell when heaven breaks you
Why not?
Throw you in the world and you still gettin burned through
Unexplained.
I'm Aries ramming through emcees
Egyptian astrology? How original.
Your flow ass like you just ate baked beans
Worst punch ever written.
Sajjad motherfucker leaving you with questions
I have none.
And if you want it motherfucker come and test him
Alright.
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Re: S a double J

Postby Xray » Nov 29th, '10, 13:39

Dumbest feedback ever. But really now? And I'm the butthurt one? Haha. This verse was wack as shit and I'll never deny that. Just a bad time for creativity, I'll show you soon haha.
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Re: S a double J

Postby Audi » Nov 29th, '10, 21:49

I kinda stayed up all night last night and it turned me into a moody bastard. I'm usually pretty humble towards feed, it just struck a chord with me. That's all.
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