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Vent (Feat. Classthe_king) His verse still to be edited in

Postby ShaBruv » Dec 1st, '10, 20:04

At the edge 'lonely this is my last attempt to vent
Underfed, boney, But i can't resist my nasty temperament
Suicidal thought's, guess death's a part of life
Who am i to talk, assess and start to write
Spit my heart tonight, let the pen cry on the page
But tears away i'll wipe ,repent and die a sage
Spit fire lines with Satan, stay on my grind like im skatin
They say rap's rocky but for me it's plain sailing
Used to act cocky, no silver lining, rain veiling
By lightening i was struck , an epiphany was imminent
My life became unstuck, lit up just like a filament
I say rap changed my life, and i know its a cliche
But its like im living in a movie, but now i right the screenplay

Feed:http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=103146

Feedback please

P.S the flow is a bit off
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Vent (Feat. Classthe_king) His verse still to be edited

Postby classthe_king » Dec 1st, '10, 20:52

lolwut
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Vent (Feat. Classthe_king) His verse still to be edited

Postby ShaBruv » Dec 1st, '10, 20:59

classthe_king wrote:lolwut



couldnt wait
I know you want to retaliate but you won't dare,
Cause you fuckin with some ****** like this who just don't care.

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Re: Vent (Feat. Classthe_king) His verse still to be edited

Postby WakeUpShow » Dec 1st, '10, 22:08

classthe_king wrote:lolwut

you gon get to our collab first right? ;)
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Re: Vent (Feat. Classthe_king) His verse still to be edited

Postby classthe_king » Dec 1st, '10, 22:34

Every motherfucker wants a collab from me. I guess that's the price to pay when you're the best.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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