Ships In The Night

[Audi]

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Instrumental:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VX0osnzESnI

Be Like Ships That Pass In The Night
If two people are like ships that pass in the night, they meet once or twice by chance for a short time and then do not see each other again.

(Chorus)
Passing like ships in the night through life
Familiar faces making you look twice
Passing like ships in the night through life
Familiar faces making you look twice

(Verse)
I take a seat at the bar like "Have I seen ya before"
She replies "No" and hands me the key to her car
Like "Drive me home, please, it isn't too far
I've had a...shot or 3 and A martini for par"
So easily I'm drawn and tookin in by her red lips
That black dress, and skin smooth as velvet
Buckled her belt quick and put my foot to the floor
Then drove off to the bridge over lookin the shore
Bookin ofcourse, yeah I'm speedin to the climax
She let's her hair down, adjusts and reclines that
I park the car in a lot and then we climb back
Then I park the car, she moans, as I slide fast
I'm seeing life flash, watch my skin turning grey
Nails in my back and her gaze is burning me
I turn away, she pushes harder and deeper
And whispers to my ear "Don't fear the reaper"

(Chorus)
Passing like ships in the night through life
Familiar faces making you look twice
Passing like ships in the night through life
Familiar faces making you look twice

[WakeUpShow]

Great flow, good multis, good drop, keep it up bro. and by the way...really creepy ending.

[Audi]

Probably my favorite piece from you thus far.

The story-telling was smooth and engaging.

The first two lines flowed like honey.

Storytelling might be where your strength lies, I think.

Again a metaphor at play here... is this flirting with Death or something?

Criticisms (just to nitpick):

"Reclines that"... I don't think this makes sense. Maybe you meant "reclines back"?

Also, you say you parked the car in a lot, then you say "then I park"... stating the same thing twice.

Flirting with death. Good call.

I need to put seat in that line so I can' still stay "reclines that" because I don't want to repeat "back"

Park the car the second time is referring to penetration. lol