Amadeo wrote:LOL. Text-ceeing is the phase everyone goes through.
When I was a teenager, I used to do it all the time. Now I just show people some shit I write every now and then.
It's more for just making sure I never go rusty in case I want to pursue rap.
I'm sure you will post a few more verses. Just much less often.
Amadeo wrote:As for the verse itself... it's solid.
Feel like you repeated the word "first" too much though.
classthe_king wrote:Amadeo wrote:LOL. Text-ceeing is the phase everyone goes through.
When I was a teenager, I used to do it all the time. Now I just show people some shit I write every now and then.
It's more for just making sure I never go rusty in case I want to pursue rap.
I'm sure you will post a few more verses. Just much less often.
No, I'm saying I'm not writing verses for text anymore, as you can tell this is a lot different then most of my verses.
k block wrote:classthe_king wrote:Amadeo wrote:LOL. Text-ceeing is the phase everyone goes through.
When I was a teenager, I used to do it all the time. Now I just show people some shit I write every now and then.
It's more for just making sure I never go rusty in case I want to pursue rap.
I'm sure you will post a few more verses. Just much less often.
No, I'm saying I'm not writing verses for text anymore, as you can tell this is a lot different then most of my verses.
I got you messsage dude. I'll feed this when I wake up. Its 9 am and I ain't been to bed lol
But each rhyme’s a curse cause when people say they wanna break my heart
I say good luck; you’ll have to find it first
k block wrote:Hmm..But each rhyme’s a curse cause when people say they wanna break my heart
I say good luck; you’ll have to find it first
That was my favorite line. My only quarrell is that you should have used some internals to keep the flow up. Just for ex:
But each rhyme's a curse til I make my mark you say you wanna break my heart
I say good luck; you'll have to find it first
^^^ Obviously not exactly like that, but you get what I mean. Work with the internals if you want to extend lines like that.
Although I don't particularly enjoy the same rhyme scheme all through a verse, this was pretty good. It's cool that you're coming to a point in yourself where you're making music for yourself and not 'dressing it up' for text or whatever else. Did I have a hand in that? haha.
Anyhow, this flowed pretty good, man. It was hard to find at first because there's no commas or periods to signify when and where to pause/stop.
Also, this style seems alot different than what you've done in the past. That's also cool that you're trying to branch out.
Sorry it took so long for me to respond, I was on my phone when I've been posting but I like to use the laptop if I'm going to be making long posts like this, lol. When I get my audio ish up we're going to have to go in on something.
CoSh wrote:I really couldn't find the flow tbh. But I really like the internal multis, and it was a good last verse. Although I don't know why you didn't just give me this verse lol.
Xray wrote:Honestly this felt much more raw than anything I've read from you. First verse without the bullshit text structure and you're already on the right track. Fuck making text look good, cause text structure kills the rhythm on any beat and demolishes your chances of flowing better. Keep it street and keep it raw and fuck what a 2 year old gots to say about anything... Cosh is a fucking idiot.
Xray wrote:Honestly this felt much more raw than anything I've read from you. First verse without the bullshit text structure and you're already on the right track. Fuck making text look good, cause text structure kills the rhythm on any beat and demolishes your chances of flowing better. Keep it street and keep it raw and fuck what a 2 year old gots to say about anything... Cosh is a fucking idiot.
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