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MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

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MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Mr.F*ckOff » Dec 4th, '10, 02:56

Every night i can still feel her "cold" breath, softly blowing on my neck. Her finger tip's as soft as i can remember, gentley touching my skin. It's almost as if i were trapped in a dream, when she was still with me. She send's cold chill's through out my body, every time i hear her call my name. Her voice is as beauitful as a bird's whistle, singing to a cool night's Fall breeze. I can still hear her foot step's, as she walk's to the bed. "Eric...Eric" I could die a happy man, every time she call's for me. "Eric...Eric" Why doe's my wife sound so worried ? "Eric...Eric...Wake Up" Why is my wife shouting for me to wake up ? "Oh God Why ?... Baby, Please Come Back To Me !" Im still here, im with you, why is my wife crying ? Is she in trouble ? Im with you baby. Why is my wife shouting on the phone, screaming for help ! Im so confused. Why am i getting such a powerful headach ? Blood is running down my face, dripping on my pillow. "Please Help, My Husband Has Shot Himself In The Head, All Beacause Of Me...Oh My God...Oh My God...Eriiiiiccc...Oh My Go...Baby Plea......." Why is my wife saying i've killed myself, i am perf....... As i step back, and gasped over what i've saw... I've killd myself. Im laying face down in my pillow, with a note beside me saying... "Im so sorry i had to do this. I can't live with-out you in my life. Please understand i did this out of pure love. Im sorry. Love alway's Your's Forever" ...

So this is basicaly about a man, who think's his wife is still with him, after she had "supossibly passed away" only to find out at the end, he was the ghost haunting the very room he killed himself in. It's a break up gone very wrong ! I hope you all liked it :)
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 5th, '10, 21:44

thank you, i'm so stealing that now for my movie! hahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Block » Dec 6th, '10, 00:59

Good job, you just described the plot of "The Sixth Sense". Bruce Willis will be proud.
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby gutawafang » Dec 6th, '10, 01:57

Uh... :( What? :o

Oh. :D














Huh? :confusion:














:'(










K. :happy:
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Postby WakeUpShow » Dec 6th, '10, 03:19

decent writing. keep writing bro.
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Block » Dec 6th, '10, 03:53

Oh, and why the fuck do you put an apostrophe before every god damn 's'??
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Mr.F*ckOff » Dec 6th, '10, 15:46

k block wrote:Oh, and why the fuck do you put an apostrophe before every god damn 's'??

K Block buddy.... You know idk bro ! But thatx for pointing that out bestest buddy ever :)
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby D-IX » Dec 6th, '10, 22:45

K Block>Writer's Block>Alphabet Blocks>Cock Block's
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby Solace » Dec 6th, '10, 23:42

D-IX wrote:K Block>Writer's Block>Alphabet Blocks>Cock Block's

You make a good point. :y:
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Re: MY STORY..WITH A TWIST AT THE END !!!!!

Postby WakeUpShow » Dec 6th, '10, 23:49

Solace wrote:
D-IX wrote:K Block>Writer's Block>Alphabet Blocks>Cock Block's

You make a good point. :y:

yo Solace could you give me some feedback on "My Time" "Gorgeous" "The Plan" and "Fight to the Top"
you don't have to do them all, but if you did a few I'd appreciate it.
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