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Re: Killin Spree (Quick 10) Feed!

Postby WakeUpShow » Dec 9th, '10, 00:59

couple good lines in there but nothing special. I see you focused more on the flow and the flow was good :y:
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Re: Killin Spree (Quick 10) Feed!

Postby Sam. » Dec 9th, '10, 11:56

Rhyming was good but was not hard hitting .
Keep writing and next time try a 16 .+
Try and add more subject matter to it.
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