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Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

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Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 30th, '10, 23:09

I sampled a part from Christina Perri's song "Jar of Hearts" which, if you haven't heard it, should give it a listen....enjoy this though :D

She infects my mind, a cancer to each of my brain cells,
I thought I could simply leave and again change wells,
Her memory is trapped in my mind, and the pain swells,
She stabbed me through my heart, now the stain smells,
Looking at this angel every day, made me only gain hells,
Now I just look at the story, that every night my rain tells,
Lightning in clouds, no longer do I have the arms of a lover,
She whispers his name, my mind now alarms of another,
Traces of her finger on my skin, for its imprints she leaves,
Her scent, her presence, I know its incense she breathes,
She used to sing her sweet song, sitting on her bird perch,
Every day, a loss for words, had me playing a word search,
Now other guys approach, they wear cologne to impress,
Imprison the minds of those who see her, alone you arrest,
And what began as a burning flame, is now just lonely ash,
I tried to fly in her blue skies, but once again I only crash,

I know I can't take one more step towards you
Cause all that's waiting is regret
Don't you know I'm not your ghost anymore
You lost the love I loved the most
I learned to live, half alive
And now you want me one more time

She’s flowing her hair, without ever even showing she cares,
She never enters a room, without guys knowing she’s there,
With ink about her, all I can do is heal pages without her,
I think about her, I’m trapped in steal cages without her,
I followed her shining presence, knowing it was fool’s gold,
Awoke in a cold sweat, tip toeing now I know the pool’s cold,
She was transgression, now I know a sinner has more lies,
I know, an eagle with broken wings, eventually soars skies,
I wonder how she sees me, through her little whore eyes,
She gives me the cold shoulder, does she see frozen tears,
She sees what she wants to in herself, that’s chosen mirrors,
And when she speaks to all guys, all she ever does is talk lust,
Disturbing more than the chalk boards, and their chalk dust,
And off her weathered diary, never again will she knock rust,
On her journal, you’ll find, tears on pages, and scraped locks,
She puts a good girl image locked away, in a heart shaped box,

I know I can't take one more step towards you
‘Cause all that's waiting is regret
Don't you know I'm not your ghost anymore
You lost the love I loved the most
I learned to live, half alive
And now you want me one more time

Through those librarian glasses, each lens fixes crosses,
X-ray vision, she sees his heart that only depicts his losses,
Her breeze makes, those who watch in awe, knees shakes,
I look in her eyes, and see inside of two eyes of the storm,
And each of our past summer nights, always dies in the warm,
If I could ask, I’d ask when she steals hearts, was theft planned,
I wish I could have prom’s last dance, holding your left hand,
Hold your waist, and find the best way to mask my two left feet,
That’s even if there is no where left to dance, all except street,
If we dance, I might speak, of the birth mark on your right cheek,
Today, I promised myself, all of her memories are passed away,
Even though, from then until now, they will always ask to say,
And I know if I could just simply try and borrow her hex,
I’ll know that I will have her by today, tomorrow or next
I guess when I look in her-eyes, I’m just shook and sur-prised,
That she would even look back, (That she’d even look back)

I know I can't take one more step towards you
‘Cause all that's waiting is regret
Don't you know I'm not your ghost anymore
You lost the love I loved the most
I learned to live, half alive
And now you want me one more time

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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 31st, '10, 01:06

Bump,,
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Enimee » Dec 31st, '10, 02:02

1 word, powerful

good shyt id break down more but im bout to roll out and i spent too much time reading it already lol


but yeah two thumbs up
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 31st, '10, 21:38

haha thanks Enimee :D
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 2nd, '11, 10:00

bump..
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Edge » Jan 2nd, '11, 18:33

good shit man, well rap wise at least... sortta reminded me of the beggining of space bound before he gets angry
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 3rd, '11, 07:40

Thanks a million, Edge :D
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby I'mShadiest » Jan 3rd, '11, 15:43

She infects my mind, a cancer to each of my brain cells,
I thought I could simply leave and again change wells,
Her memory is trapped in my mind, and the pain swells,
She stabbed me through my heart, now the stain smells,
Looking at this angel every day, made me only gain hells,
Now I just look at the story, that every night my rain tells,
Lightning in clouds, no longer do I have the arms of a lover,
She whispers his name, my mind now alarms of another,
Traces of her finger on my skin, for its imprints she leaves,
Her scent, her presence, I know its incense she breathes,
She used to sing her sweet song, sitting on her bird perch,
Every day, a loss for words, had me playing a word search,
Now other guys approach, they wear cologne to impress,
Imprison the minds of those who see her, alone you arrest,
And what began as a burning flame, is now just lonely ash,
I tried to fly in her blue skies, but once again I only crash,

I know I can't take one more step towards you
Cause all that's waiting is regret
Don't you know I'm not your ghost anymore
You lost the love I loved the most
I learned to live, half alive
And now you want me one more time


I thought I would do it from the females point of view. It's called:

'He Wants To Stalk Me One More Time'

He forgets my name, like alzheimer's to each of his brain cells,
He thought he could simply leave and text me, so I change cells,
His memory is selective, he's neglective with strange smells,
He tried to stab me through my heart, but I exclaim Help!,
Looking at the devil every day, he makes derange spells,
He just makes up a story, that every night he aint well,
Frightening in the house, I hear a shudder of the alarm cover,
He whispers my name, all I hear is this man mutter,
Traces of him from the sink, the foot prints that he leaves,
His scent, his presence, It's so intense that my nose bleeds,
He whistles in the halls, that 'Mountain King', that old piece,
Every day, I see Word Myth, now he's in my home in the flesh,
Now I see him approach me, standing there alone in my dress,
An ex-prisoner with a sick mind, thoughts of groping my breast,
He's blazing my curtains with a burning flame, so many ashes,
He escapes and tries to flee in my car, but only crashes,

I know I shouldn't take one more step towards him,
Cause all that's waiting is a ratchet,
I just know I shouldn't approach anymore,
I'm walking slow, I'm so close
I can't see the guy, he's still alive
All he stammers is "I know where you work bitch!"
So I take a hammer and I mince Words Myth

Hahah, I'm only joking.

Btw I liked your word play. Mine was just a quick joke.
"I Knew I Wanted To Be A Rapper When I Was 14"

"No One Looked Twice At Me When I First Signed To Dre"

"I Wasn't Thinking That The Peroxide Thing Was Going To Be My Look; I Was Just Being Stupid On Drugs"

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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 3rd, '11, 17:15

Do you really think its stalkerish, Shadiest?
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby I'mShadiest » Jan 3rd, '11, 18:12

I think it was really well written, cool word play, metaphors etc

I was just doing a small satire with this being on a Slim Shady forum.
"I Knew I Wanted To Be A Rapper When I Was 14"

"No One Looked Twice At Me When I First Signed To Dre"

"I Wasn't Thinking That The Peroxide Thing Was Going To Be My Look; I Was Just Being Stupid On Drugs"

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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 4th, '11, 20:11

haha okay, Shadiest :D
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Tash8 » Jan 19th, '11, 22:15

u write a lot like immortal technique...which is really raw...good shit brah

I like this, like the story, rhymes, i can flow it, so it was good. point blank period.
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 22nd, '11, 05:54

Tash8 wrote:u write a lot like immortal technique...which is really raw...good shit brah

I like this, like the story, rhymes, i can flow it, so it was good. point blank period.


Can't believe I never thought about it like that but now that I think bout it you do write like Immortal Tech lol Always raw great multies like always. Very good word choice too. Like the emotion and I know what your talkin about. Good piece brother
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Re: Word's Myth - You Want Me One More Time

Postby Spaceboundsupenova » Feb 17th, '11, 21:34

I really liked it. Deep like oceans deep.
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