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[WakeUpShow]

A white box in the middle of a white bare room
I try to tear through but it was back to square two
As time went by, my interest peaked
I was into this deep, and judgement visciously seeped
I couldn't get in, or figure out what it was
It drove me fuckin nuts when an idea gave sudden rush
I paced the room, and mumbled under my breath
I beat and thundered my chest after I put my blunders to rest
I tried everything, and pondered for weeks
It bothered my fears which fathered the tears
I had something to say, but no one to tell it to
It was like wanting reassurance, but no one to second you
I finally got the courage to find the key in my heart
I couldn't see in the dark but the key was a start
I sighed then I stopped, and then pried open the top
I saw a pen and some paper when I climbed into the box
I had made it, when I wasn't given a fighter's shot
and it all made sense, I was in still writer's block


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[Tash8]

i mean it's cool..but my only issue with it is, u keep saying

I did this, and I did that
I was this, and I was that

change it up a lil bit... I like this line:
I beat and thundered my chest after I put my blunders to rest

[WakeUpShow]

bump..

[WakeUpShow]

bump god i hate bumping

[classthe_king]

Ummmm I don't know what to say lol, pretty weird concept. Was this written to a beat? Cause a lot of the lines seemed to short, like they needed some more syllables. I really don't know what I just read though, it seemed like a bunch of random gibberish unless you're so metaphorical mastermind but I doubt that.

[WakeUpShow]

Ummmm I don't know what to say lol, pretty weird concept. Was this written to a beat? Cause a lot of the lines seemed to short, like they needed some more syllables. I really don't know what I just read though, it seemed like a bunch of random gibberish unless you're so metaphorical mastermind but I doubt that.

The blank room is his mind. The box is a writers block, something he has to overcome. Him trying to break through is him trying to overcome the writer's block and write. He was in a room by himself representing the fact that he can't express himself to anyone or get his thoughts across on paper. He realizes that the key to overcoming it is to just say what is in his heart, that's why the key was in his heart. When he overcomes it and gets in the middle of the problem, the writer's block, he realizes that all he needs is a pen, paper, and his heart.

[classthe_king]

No I understood it, I just don't understand why you pulled it off the way you did. No one would want to listen to this. You should have made him in a war or something to be the metaphor for the writers block, would have made it more exciting.

[WakeUpShow]

No I understood it, I just don't understand why you pulled it off the way you did. No one would want to listen to this. You should have made him in a war or something to be the metaphor for the writers block, would have made it more exciting.

ok but what parts seemed like gibberish?

[classthe_king]

Pretty much the whole thing. It seemed like you were just saying random lines that didn't connect at all. There was no central theme that the listener could relate too.

[WakeUpShow]

Pretty much the whole thing. It seemed like you were just saying random lines that didn't connect at all. There was no central theme that the listener could relate too.

it was supposed to sorta seem all over the place until the last line ties it together nicely, or so i thought.

[WakeUpShow]

bump..

[Ka0t1c]

ok, it deleted my reply but i remember i said i liked this verse, good lyrics, good short piece.

[WakeUpShow]

ok, it deleted my reply but i remember i said i liked this verse, good lyrics, good short piece.

thanks man