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another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 2nd, '11, 00:43

written in about twenty minutes or so
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107286&p=1504317#p1504317


Love me or hate me dont give a fuck how you rate me
shove me now? nah better decapitate me
only way ya gonna me from raping/ or you could start fellating
i dont wanna have to resort to masturbating
ooh look at ya shaking /your legs ima break em
my consciense is vacant aint no use appealing
shrunk away all my feelings/ see sick shit i aint reeling,
unflinching when peeling ya skin wont stop if your squealing
im Winching you up and nailing you to the ceiling
look up and see you before i start dreaming
Wake up a four am violently screaming
plagued by evil mischievious demons
overwhelmed by every devious feeling
my psychiatrist shouldnt of started with me
got pissed and severed his artery
taught that motherfucker a fast lesson
and i aint paying for that last session
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Re: another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 2nd, '11, 00:58

Needs refinement for sure but i wnated to get the lyircs down as fast as they came to me. looking over it now i can see a few extra rhymes i missed and i could deffo make the flow a bit smoother.
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Re: another crack

Postby classthe_king » Feb 2nd, '11, 00:59

You need a link of feed
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 2nd, '11, 01:01

sorry to sound stupid but whats a "link of feed"
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Re: another crack

Postby classthe_king » Feb 2nd, '11, 01:03

Mr. Chambers wrote:3) One link of feedback you have given will need to be posted before you post a song.


Basically just give feed to somebody else and then copy the url and post it with your piece as proof that you post something.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 2nd, '11, 01:18

did i do the link of feed okay?
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Re: another crack

Postby classthe_king » Feb 2nd, '11, 02:07

No...it has to be to another person's piece in CW
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Re: another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 3rd, '11, 03:25

small rewrite, opinions?
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Re: another crack

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 3rd, '11, 23:02

my opinion is this should be locked and u should do a link of feedback. :facepalm
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: another crack

Postby bipolar-bear » Feb 4th, '11, 00:18

link of feed! :coffee:
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