Love no life

[Just Silver]

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I've been saying to myself I'll get by on a job with an aisle 5
And that I'll survive with no car to drive
But now that thought gets to me for a 9 to 5
Cause I've got no ride and the applications were applied
But damn why do I put up with this shit
Fuck cutting a wrist but need a plan to get rich
Open hands on a bitch grabbing both of her tits
Thats as close as it gets from my results
Thats what I dream try to redeem and say adios
Want my Audi low and have blunt rides call shotty yo
But in reality its real rough like I've seen enough
I feel enough to grab reality and beat it up
Kill this stuff its ridiculous how you think i was pictured as
While I picked my ass I was thinking bout the bits of cash
It wouldn't last cause its just a disability
That check is willingly trying to get me from not killing me
But autism or not all listen then rot
Sweet flows that I jot bitches calling the cops
Keep calling the shots but i meant alcohol
I mean I could ball but right now not at all
Writem' all from my nothingness and Im crazy if im lovin it
I discovered quick what I need to do I can shovel shit
Its $300 under the table like a dog
And im able dog even if im disabled dog
Its fifteen hours but its hella worth it
Like Yella worded it pop my trunk theres a person
And thats how I feel sometimes I just want to be on a grind
Like all the time im unwinding
Relaxed my whole life I love having like no life

[Just Silver]

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[Sam.]

I've been saying to myself I'll get by on a job with an aisle 5
And that I'll survive with no car to drive
But now that thought gets to me for a 9 to 5
Cause I've got no ride and the applications were applied
But damn why do I put up with this shit
Fuck cutting a wrist but need a plan to get rich
Open hands on a bitch grabbing both of her tits
Thats as close as it gets from my results
Thats what I dream try to redeem and say adios
Want my Audi low and have blunt rides call shotty yo
But in reality its real rough like I've seen enough
I feel enough to grab reality and beat it up
Kill this stuff its ridiculous how you think i was pictured as
While I picked my ass I was thinking bout the bits of cash
It wouldn't last cause its just a disability
That check is willingly trying to get me from not killing me
But autism or not all listen then rot
Sweet flows that I jot bitches calling the cops
Keep calling the shots but i meant alcohol
I mean I could ball but right now not at all
Writem' all from my nothingness and Im crazy if im lovin it
I discovered quick what I need to do I can shovel shit
Its $300 under the table like a dog
And im able dog even if im disabled dog
Its fifteen hours but its hella worth it
Like Yella worded it pop my trunk theres a person
And thats how I feel sometimes I just want to be on a grind
Like all the time im unwinding
Relaxed my whole life I love having like no life

I highlighted the lines that i liked .
Now,
the flow was superb i mean it's written for a perfect rap song.
structure wise it was okay ,i can see smalls bars followed by bigger one's but that affected the flow by only a bit.
The content was ayt,only thing is you used the same words repeatedly like here.

Its $300 under the table like a dog
And im able dog even if im disabled dog

[Just Silver]

I've been saying to myself I'll get by on a job with an aisle 5
And that I'll survive with no car to drive
But now that thought gets to me for a 9 to 5
Cause I've got no ride and the applications were applied
But damn why do I put up with this shit
Fuck cutting a wrist but need a plan to get rich
Open hands on a bitch grabbing both of her tits
Thats as close as it gets from my results
Thats what I dream try to redeem and say adios
Want my Audi low and have blunt rides call shotty yo
But in reality its real rough like I've seen enough
I feel enough to grab reality and beat it up
Kill this stuff its ridiculous how you think i was pictured as
While I picked my ass I was thinking bout the bits of cash
It wouldn't last cause its just a disability
That check is willingly trying to get me from not killing me
But autism or not all listen then rot
Sweet flows that I jot bitches calling the cops
Keep calling the shots but i meant alcohol
I mean I could ball but right now not at all
Writem' all from my nothingness and Im crazy if im lovin it
I discovered quick what I need to do I can shovel shit
Its $300 under the table like a dog
And im able dog even if im disabled dog
Its fifteen hours but its hella worth it
Like Yella worded it pop my trunk theres a person
And thats how I feel sometimes I just want to be on a grind
Like all the time im unwinding
Relaxed my whole life I love having like no life

I highlighted the lines that i liked .
Now,
the flow was superb i mean it's written for a perfect rap song.
structure wise it was okay ,i can see smalls bars followed by bigger one's but that affected the flow by only a bit.
The content was ayt,only thing is you used the same words repeatedly like here.

Its $300 under the table like a dog
And im able dog even if im disabled dog

good looks on the feed guy
and yea the repeated words is due to the fact i was listening to alot of Cassidy lol