verse 2 of "anjealous"

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I fed mikes piece.


To keep safe I keep a keepsake and I stash it in a briefcase
Attached with a brief case of nostalgia..
A picture perfect life to recall from,
A moment we could relate when all's done
Relive the small ones.. Rebuild or regift or refill
If your cup has spilled empty...
Jotting down my memories, I'm diving from the cliff notes
In hopes I hit the bottom before I become a sick joke,
This note holds to the rhythm of your heart parting grips with my fingertips..
A faint song lingers while it's ripping apart, instantly dark
To the touch that was typically hard, to resist (give it up)
That was this, this is love.. This is us (nothing much)
Fucking sucks, blowing dust from my lungs so that I can try to breathe again..
Easing in the air, I try to spare a part of "meaningless"..
The meaning is a meeting list..
to share a part in reading it and weeding out the needy is a cause for lost ingredients..
Bake me a fucking cake...

[WakeUpShow]

great verse, great flow. and i bust out laughing at the last line because it was not expected at all haha

[Static]

Wow, that was a great verse. I love the rhyming scheme and the rhymes! And I found and read the first verse too. You're really talented, it would be awesome to hear this song recorded!

And as Cosh said, that last line was funny

[Just Silver]

this was great really liked the flow and the beginning was what really made it an attention grabber


overall 10/10 in my book

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Thanks guys. Appreciate the feed. I'll get on returning the feed.

[Yah-hah]

I think listening to guys like Spoonfull and Sadistik helps me get your flow so much better than before. Like most of your pieces its very poetic and the word choice is always top notch. Lookin forward to hearing this recorded, I'm very curious to hear how you sound these days. How the record deal shit goin these days anyways?

[Block]

I think listening to guys like Spoonfull and Sadistik helps me get your flow so much better than before. Like most of your pieces its very poetic and the word choice is always top notch. Lookin forward to hearing this recorded, I'm very curious to hear how you sound these days. How the record deal shit goin these days anyways?

Hey man, good to see you back. Thanks for the feed. I didn't sign with that label. They're based out of oklahoma and it would have been too hard to get things done. I'm moving west in the spring, though, so I'm going to put some demos in@labels out there. I'll post done music here when it's done too. I know that alot of people have been wondering what maybe and I have been cooking up. I hope we done disappoint, lol.

[Yah-hah]

I think listening to guys like Spoonfull and Sadistik helps me get your flow so much better than before. Like most of your pieces its very poetic and the word choice is always top notch. Lookin forward to hearing this recorded, I'm very curious to hear how you sound these days. How the record deal shit goin these days anyways?

Hey man, good to see you back. Thanks for the feed. I didn't sign with that label. They're based out of oklahoma and it would have been too hard to get things done. I'm moving west in the spring, though, so I'm going to put some demos in@labels out there. I'll post done music here when it's done too. I know that alot of people have been wondering what maybe and I have been cooking up. I hope we done disappoint, lol.

Shot yo ass shoulda came to oklahoma we coulda kicked it, lol Me you and chett starr

[Block]

haha.. You live in ok? That's cool about though. I'm moving to vegas. Can't wait to watch ufc live, lol. Shits gonna be dope.

How close is vegas?

[RainMan44]

This was very good, and the writing was very well-structured. I really like your work, keep it up

My favorite part was

"To keep safe I keep a keepsake and I stash it in a briefcase
Attached with a brief case of nostalgia..
A picture perfect life to recall from,
A moment we could relate when all's done."