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Random verse, rate, leave feedback please :D

Postby RainMan44 » Feb 15th, '11, 07:16

Link of feedback: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=108061&p=1517600#p1517600



Yo if I diss you on a track, don't even bother to bust back
'Cause you fake M.C's suck so much dick you disgust fags
What's that? I'm hearin' that y'all wanna challenge the king?
Well, there's a couple different ways I can handle this thing
I can have an influx of hooligans, runnin' through ya den
And endin' each an every person in your crew of 10
Or I can lace tracks to teach you fake cats
That the motherfuckin' crown is what I'm here to take back
My venomous verses will tear hearts and end careers
Rip you in 10 parts, and begin sendin' tears
Down the eyes of my competition, I'm enjoyin' this
Sittin' back watchin' these cats throwin' fits
And I can have my barrel be where they lips wrap
But I'd much rather ignore 'em and let the chips stack
So sit back, as I kick flows that make the haters cry
Just the motherfuckin' thoughts of a faded guy
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Postby RainMan44 » Feb 15th, '11, 07:46

Anybody? :'(
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Postby StylishDevil » Feb 15th, '11, 08:21

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Postby mdemaz » Feb 15th, '11, 08:25

2 forced quad multis..The rest was good though.
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Postby RainMan44 » Feb 15th, '11, 08:30

mdemaz wrote:2 forced quad multis..The rest was good though.

Just wondering, which one stood out as forced?
...because I have one that I forced because I didn't have anything else to say...let's see if you get the right one :)
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Postby mdemaz » Feb 15th, '11, 08:40

I actually don't care about forced multis, as long as they make sense.
Like:

Whack her with a fat turd and slap herbs into a pipe
that burns.
Etc.
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Postby RainMan44 » Feb 15th, '11, 08:49

mdemaz wrote:I actually don't care about forceed multis, as long as they make sense.
Like:

Whack her with a fat turd and slap herbs into a pipe
that burns.
Etc.

Haha, the one I forced was actually the haters cry/faded guy one...was that the one you had in mind?
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Postby mdemaz » Feb 15th, '11, 08:53

It's hard to tell now..
I listened to it with a beat and it seems to come together...
Those red ones seemed forced at first..
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Postby Sam. » Feb 15th, '11, 11:26

ur good at multis son keep at it.
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Postby RainMan44 » Feb 16th, '11, 03:36

MCSam wrote:ur good at multis son keep at it.

Thank u !
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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