Angels Caw

[classthe_king]

I finished a test early yesterday and wrote this in like 30 minutes. It's not done yet

I struggle to strive in these ever so cumbersome times
As I’m soaked by the rain cloud that covers the skies
So don’t be surprised if you don’t find love in these eyes
Cause my heart is one place that it doesn’t reside
Trust me, I’ve done love and I’m done with its lies
It’s an endless masquerade as my trust is disguised
And faith is lost in the leaves on this path to the dark
For the black rose has an unrelenting grasp on my heart
In this race to the top I was the last one to start
So I try to catch up and get on track with the starts
I’m craftin this art with the tears from the days ya wept
To fight the ghosts of my past until they’re laid to rest
I was so close to going over I could taste the death
But I slowly fell back down to the ravens nest
As I’m tangled all up in the mangled straw
And beatin down by the hearts most painful flaw
Hear the angels caw…





http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107863

[DƎRDYPK]

solid drop broski
hope this ending up on audio

[Block]

This is such a far cry from the first stuff I read from you. Sadistik has had a profound affect on your writing style, lol.

the imagery here was really good. You portrayed a sense of darkness but hurt at the same time. Nothing seemed forced to me, and nothing really looked out of place or as if it didn't belong. I enjoyed this, bro.

[Sam.]

A decent verse bro ,some lines seemed predictable as in what you would say in the next one.
Nice smooth poetic touch to it ,i really like this king of verses.

[RainMan44]

Good job
Nothing sounded forced, every single line was where it needed to be, good rhyming.

[WakeUpShow]

great flow and emotion man. rhyming was on point, so i guess the only complaint i have is the....title! haha keep it up

[classthe_king]

great flow and emotion man. rhyming was on point, so i guess the only complaint i have is the....title! haha keep it up

The title makes more sense with the finished verse

[WakeUpShow]

great flow and emotion man. rhyming was on point, so i guess the only complaint i have is the....title! haha keep it up

The title makes more sense with the finished verse

ok i'll keep an eye out for it. and do you think you could feed "Golden Terra of Rap" for me?

[Iris]

This is greatness. A little bit sadistik-ish but this is great.

[Xray]

This was literally flawless. Great use of words and great flow. The way you started it was set to be a dope ass verse you can tell just by those lines. The ending is even better. 10/10.

[classthe_king]

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=108595