MCSam & PK - Bad Luck

[DƎRDYPK]

sam sent me this a while ago & I never got to writing untill like 10 minutes ago dissing myself

but anyway

[MC SAM]
My bitch's actin all strange but she knows I get paid
she only shows her true colors when she wanna get laid
So I turn the lights off,the pant's drop, her ass is soft...but wait
I hear a different moan so I turn on the lights to see it's my maid
I just realized my girls the other room what a shame
pushed the bitch to the floor,there's a knock on the door, hear come's my dame
c'mon get clothed,jump out of this window,or imma tie you in this chain
cut you into pieces ,hide it in the freezer,yeah call me insane
stop screaming will you or i'll fuckin kill you,okay here is a duct tape
now here's the deal,take this fuckin pill and dare you call this a rape
whatchu cryin about ,i had not altenate route,i can see your pussies in pain
the best fuck i had ever,never realized you are a virgin
before my girl finds out ,you need to hide now,look there's my closet main
and don't you worry,it's only january,stay there till it rains
could have acted straight,action done in haste ,wasted my dick in vain
just as i am about to leave,head down in grief ,she whispered "I have AIDS"

[PK]
I hate my life because my penis is tiny
I'm always worried that someones out there to find me
yesterday my dog farted & I almost puked
I'll be stressed less when snow melts off my roof
I can't make beats because my drums suck dick
my whole life is discovering what bad luck is
one of my old songs made a mirror fall & shatter
ever since then my lifes been a slow disaster
I bump Lil B but theres no hoes on my dick
if their was they hopped off cause they know that I bit
my rap style from Eminem &... ICP
with that said forget em both buy my cd
it comes out on the day your girl leaves you
for some faggot like me she can actually speak to
who am I talking to? my fucking raps suck
I'm just some emo blogger punk married to bad luck

lof: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=108238


& lols on my behalf

[Sam.]

Thanks bra ,dope verse there.
Feed nikkas.

[mdemaz]

Swagged out!

Can't wait to hear this on wax.

Well....I've read this a few times actually..It's grown on me.
i know you're new and stuff..
But it was pretty good man.
I can't really describe what's wrong with it cause it's pretty pointless pointing it out..

[Sam.]

bump

[Just Silver]

[MC SAM]
My bitch's actin all strange but she knows I get paid
she only shows her true colors when she wanna get laid
So I turn the lights off,the pant's drop, her ass is soft...but wait
I hear a different moan so I turn on the lights to see it's my maid
I just realized my girls the other room what a shame
pushed the bitch to the floor,there's a knock on the door, hear come's my dame
c'mon get clothed,jump out of this window,or imma tie you in this chain
cut you into pieces ,hide it in the freezer,yeah call me insane
stop screaming will you or i'll fuckin kill you,okay here is a duct tape
now here's the deal,take this fuckin pill and dare you call this a rape
whatchu cryin about ,i had not altenate route,i can see your pussies in pain
the best fuck i had ever,never realized you are a virgin
before my girl finds out ,you need to hide now,look there's my closet main
and don't you worry,it's only january,stay there till it rains
could have acted straight,action done in haste ,wasted my dick in vain
just as i am about to leave,head down in grief ,she whispered "I have AIDS"

[PK]
I hate my life because my penis is tiny
I'm always worried that someones out there to find me
yesterday my dog farted & I almost puked
I'll be stressed less when snow melts off my roof
I can't make beats because my drums suck dick
my whole life is discovering what bad luck is
one of my old songs made a mirror fall & shatter
ever since then my lifes been a slow disaster
I bump Lil B but theres no hoes on my dick
if their was they hopped off cause they know that I bit
my rap style from Eminem &... ICP
with that said forget em both buy my cd
it comes out on the day your girl leaves you
for some faggot like me she can actually speak to
who am I talking to? my fucking raps suck
I'm just some emo blogger punk married to bad luck

I put in bold what i liked the most from each verse
Good to be seeing more Derdy and I just started to check out some MCsam

MCsam had a great story like flow that got a lot better once it hit the bolded part IMO

Derdy PK- A funny ass intro combined with odd words that a rapper wouldnt normally say equals rhymes that surprised me that i never had thought of.

[Sam.]

[MC SAM]
My bitch's actin all strange but she knows I get paid
she only shows her true colors when she wanna get laid
So I turn the lights off,the pant's drop, her ass is soft...but wait
I hear a different moan so I turn on the lights to see it's my maid
I just realized my girls the other room what a shame
pushed the bitch to the floor,there's a knock on the door, hear come's my dame
c'mon get clothed,jump out of this window,or imma tie you in this chain
cut you into pieces ,hide it in the freezer,yeah call me insane
stop screaming will you or i'll fuckin kill you,okay here is a duct tape
now here's the deal,take this fuckin pill and dare you call this a rape
whatchu cryin about ,i had not altenate route,i can see your pussies in pain
the best fuck i had ever,never realized you are a virgin
before my girl finds out ,you need to hide now,look there's my closet main
and don't you worry,it's only january,stay there till it rains
could have acted straight,action done in haste ,wasted my dick in vain
just as i am about to leave,head down in grief ,she whispered "I have AIDS"

[PK]
I hate my life because my penis is tiny
I'm always worried that someones out there to find me
yesterday my dog farted & I almost puked
I'll be stressed less when snow melts off my roof
I can't make beats because my drums suck dick
my whole life is discovering what bad luck is
one of my old songs made a mirror fall & shatter
ever since then my lifes been a slow disaster
I bump Lil B but theres no hoes on my dick
if their was they hopped off cause they know that I bit
my rap style from Eminem &... ICP
with that said forget em both buy my cd
it comes out on the day your girl leaves you
for some faggot like me she can actually speak to
who am I talking to? my fucking raps suck
I'm just some emo blogger punk married to bad luck

I put in bold what i liked the most from each verse
Good to be seeing more Derdy and I just started to check out some MCsam

MCsam had a great story like flow that got a lot better once it hit the bolded part IMO

Derdy PK- A funny ass intro combined with odd words that a rapper wouldnt normally say equals rhymes that surprised me that i never had thought of.

thanks man ,really appreciate it.

[Sam.]

Swagged out!

Can't wait to hear this on wax.

Well....I've read this a few times actually..It's grown on me.
i know you're new and stuff..
But it was pretty good man.
I can't really describe what's wrong with it cause it's pretty pointless pointing it out..

no please elaborate what's pointless bra
it would help me improve i am not new i just started again after 3 years .

[mdemaz]

Lack of multis obviously..
I know they are not everything, but still..

[Sam.]

i don't really focus on inner multis(if that's wht u mean) when i am writing i usually go with the flow and end where i feel i cant strech it to keep it interesting.

[mdemaz]

Yeah..I tend to do that with story telling..

Anyways..I'm done feeding..Good luck on your new stuff man.
I might go to bed now..Even people without a life need sleep to go to work.


Bye.

[_Steven_]

Lmao not bad guys, PK your verse just had me lol'ing so much.

[Sam.]

Lmao not bad guys, PK your verse just had me lol'ing so much.

[Sam.]

thanks bra lello

[Sam.]

B to the UMP
fed a lot of other drops .

[Sam.]

bump