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Girls.

Postby _Steven_ » Feb 22nd, '11, 22:12

Well its like my first written in god knows how many months, only 12 bars cause im just getting back into the swing of shit plus im too tired to carry on writing lol.

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The days are long, Conditions unfair,
I gaze up at the stars wishing you was back here,
Your strong on the inside but still i react scared,
Tryna piece back together these shattered and cracked tears,
Look back at my past years, Hand was on the liqour,
Now its on the phone and in my head im saying pick-up,
Just your voice alone helps escape the thoughts of when i sicked up,
and hic-up'd, laying on the bathroom floor all pissed up,
So now i save it and limit myself to just occasions,
Like when we drink together that alones a celebration,
So if you say a womans evil all they'll just bleed and leave you,
I say no, Come to me for advice im always here for you to speak to.
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Re: Girls.

Postby DƎRDYPK » Feb 22nd, '11, 22:30

pretty good stuff Steve :y:
keep @ it you bald headed beast
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Re: Girls.

Postby SlimShadyX313X » Feb 22nd, '11, 22:31

Nice :y: , keep it up.
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Brain damage, ever since the day I was born
Drugs is what they used to say I was on
They say I never knew which way I was goin
But everywhere I go they keep playin my song.

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Re: Girls.

Postby Sam. » Feb 23rd, '11, 07:52

_Steven_ wrote:
The days are long, Conditions unfair,
I gaze up at the stars wishing you was back here,
Your strong on the inside but still i react scared,
Tryna piece back together these shattered and cracked tears,
Look back at my past years, Hand was on the liqour,
Now its on the phone and in my head im saying pick-up,

Just your voice alone helps escape the thoughts of when i sicked up,
and hic-up'd, laying on the bathroom floor all pissed up,
So now i save it and limit myself to just occasions,
Like when we drink together that alones a celebration,
So if you say a womans evil all they'll just bleed and leave you,
I say no, Come to me for advice im always here for you to speak to.

The bolded part stood out bra ,nice and simple ,good to see you dropping verses again.
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