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Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Master Chief » Mar 31st, '11, 04:10

Attempt at the same concept Lowkey & Papoose did :sweating:, Pt. II will come tomorrow (it will be the rest of the Alphabet, DUH). Lol, it's random as fuck.

Alphadeath, appalling my atheists with an album set
Biggest bossing, bitches blossom, I'm browsing breasts
Catastrophically costly chronic, get to kissing my crotch
Dissing the broads "destiny do my dirty dishes and pots!"
Emptying enemies with electrifying endless energy
Fuck facade filled faggot friends that fess and flee
Gripping glocks, gonna go kill ghosts and goblins
Hip and Hop's... my heart, I'm holding it hostage
I irritate imbeciles who isn't illing and impressing
Just justifying my job as a jerk jilting all the Jessies
Kidding? C'mon! kissing kids like the King of Pop
Logical linguist, unlyrical labels look a little lost
Move on, my money's mature and I'm best of MCs
N.igga! yeah, naughty by nature, neglecting envy

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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Maybe » Mar 31st, '11, 04:45

Not bad, not bad at all. It's very Rakim-ish, as far as the flow and structure goes, which isn't a bad thing at all. It reminded me a lot of something Papoose would write. I like it man, I give it a 9/10.
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby -[Zach]- » Mar 31st, '11, 07:26

Damn that was nice. Flowed very well and had some colorful vocabulary. Keep it up, man. Looking forward to Part II :y:
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Mar 31st, '11, 15:00

damn damn damn!!!! :worship:
The devil ain't on a level same as him!
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Master Chief » Mar 31st, '11, 19:52

Thanks for the feedback and the compliments, guys :y:
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Innovation » Mar 31st, '11, 20:30

King of pop line made me lol.

It's awesome so far man! Keep it up!
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby ArsheyHaq » Mar 31st, '11, 22:08

Very nicely done :y:


"Alphadeath, appalling my atheists with an album set
Biggest bossing, bitches blossom, I'm browsing breasts
Catastrophically costly chronic, get to kissing my crotch
Dissing the broads 'destiny do my dirty dishes and pots!'"

^^^My favorite lines, personally^^^

*waiting in anticipation for the rest of the alphabet*

I'll give you proper feedback then.
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Tash8 » Mar 31st, '11, 22:37

well, I've never really enjoyed alphabet slaughters but regardless, i think it takes a lot of skill and knowledge do it, so good job on that and props. Ur vocab is very good it seems like, carry that stuff into every lyric u write but choose words wisely depending on which flow best or fit in best, or rhyme best.

Good job man

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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Master Chief » Apr 1st, '11, 01:03

Thanks, guys :y:

Tash, I'll feed yours in a sec :y:
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Re: Alphadeath Pt. I

Postby Jay C » Apr 9th, '11, 05:59

Good job esmart.
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