Mean Fool

[ArsheyHaq]

"Mean fool
Slaughtering packs of wolves while wearing sheep wool
Drop a van full of pedofiles off in front of a preschool
Drown your whole fucking family in your gene pool"

Some dope rhyming and wordplay right there

"Theres a fine line between genius & insanity, too bad i snorted it"

Haha that was a pretty insane way to end it easily my favorite line

This is my first time reading a piece by you. I didn't know you wrote, and so well at that, but I'll definitely be looking for more from you. You really impressed me!

[Tash8]

Drown your whole fucking family in your gene pool

^ best line in the verse, super clever man


Then slit your throat & see how far your adams apple falls from the family tree
^another clever one

Theres a fine line between genius & insanity, too bad i snorted it
^ haha this one made me laugh as well, good shit man

overall, real funny man and very clever rhymes.

would love some feed on this man
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[iain08]

I read this in Possessed's voice, lol.

[VenomBlackViper]

I read this in Possessed's voice, lol.

LOL while I wrote this in a American voice (just like everything else) i'll admit i've rapped this in Possesseds voice before myself

[iain08]

I read this in Possessed's voice, lol.

LOL while I wrote this in a American voice (just like everything else) i'll admit i've rapped this in Possesseds voice before myself

Hahaha yeah, it flows just like Possessed. But that's a good thing, this was sick.

[Devil'sAdvocate]

man this is something i can imagine relapse or SSLP eminem randomly spitting.

very dope indeed

[DFrizzy44]

Love the rhyming in this...
Ur a great writer!

[mdemaz]

Lulz..Cut lines brah.
Some of that shit is dopely quotable.

[ThomasAguanis]

That was a pretty good piece. The structure of the lines may affect the flow, but I could be wrong. There's some very clever lines in there. The "too bad I snorted it" bit stood out the most to me.

[Blu]

Holy fuck this was some sweet ass shit. I like!!

[12characters]

That was a very dope piece..

[EyeQ200]

The sheeps wool etc. reminded me of Scary Movies
That's not such a bad point anyway though, this:

I'm on an insanity spree
Cut off your moms leg and choke you with the amputees knee
Use it to hang you, laugh as you rapidly bleed

Pretty much blew my mind with the multies there
The flows a little fucked though, but i can see this is from a while ago and you have improved a lot since then, definitely put humour into your lines and as somebody said it seemed a mixture of RA and a verse off the SSLP, great stuff here, even though it's early work,
And ten bars