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Sick Fuck

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 8th, '11, 23:35

Just kind of a composite of some fucked up rhymes:

It i'n't sarcasm when I say I get in car accidents/
every time I think hard about the large ass on Kim Kardashian/
have you seen it? The thing's gargantuan!/
It'd give me such a hard-on if she'd fart on my face/
I mean..oh, shit, I'm so far gone..please pardon my ways/
I just wanna get a good whiff of her carbon wastes!/
it's the kinda shit that helps me get my rocks off/
but then this Goddamn noose always loosens and turns my cock soft!/
yeah, sick fuck with disgusting habits/
who gets pissed off when those kids don't give their Trix up, those dick sucking faggots!/
so to put it out it's misery I picked up the rabbit/
grabbed a knife, lifted up, and stabbed it/
silly animal, should have jst stuck to cabbage/
Eh, life's a game of Risk...and I got three 6's when I rolled the dice/
that's when the room got as cold as ice cuz a poltergeist/
appeared from a bolt of lightning/
so I held it in a headlock 'till it agreed to fold my dry cleaning/
that's when Satan appeared, wearing only a leotard/
I told em "don't be a retard/
for God's sake, no matter how many love letters you send me I won't be your sweetheart!!"/



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Re: Sick Fuck

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 9th, '11, 08:10

"only thing i didn't like is how you ended a rhyme with 3 lines"

Yeah, these are just a bunch of rhymes that never really got anywhere, so I put them all together into one verse...so enjoy 'em for what they're worth! lol
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Re: Sick Fuck

Postby ArsheyHaq » Apr 18th, '11, 06:20

Can I get a little more feedback on this? What do you guys think of it..
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Re: Sick Fuck

Postby Maybe » Apr 18th, '11, 07:15

Your grasp of multies and how to use them is beyond a professional level. Your conceptual lines are insanely original, and the rhyming is by far the best on this site. This piece was easily a 10/10, along with just about everything you've posted. I'd really love to see your work in a full song form. :y:
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Re: Sick Fuck

Postby Sam. » Apr 18th, '11, 20:32

ArsheyHaq wrote:It i'n't sarcasm when I say I get in car accidents/
every time I think hard about the large ass on Kim Kardashian/
have you seen it? The thing's gargantuan!/
It'd give me such a hard-on if she'd fart on my face/
I mean..oh, shit, I'm so far gone..please pardon my ways/
I just wanna get a good whiff of her carbon wastes!/
it's the kinda shit that helps me get my rocks off/
but then this Goddamn noose always loosens and turns my cock soft!/
yeah, sick fuck with disgusting habits/

:worship: i i love those lines man damn !
i fuckin ran ouutta words to feed you bro lol :p
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