"Trifecta: This Would Never Work"

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Nothing too different here. Just a story.

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her three best friends 'this', 'would never', 'work'..
her three best friends 'this', 'would never', 'work'..


An angel on the left..
halo on the right..
a little bit of you,
a little me
we'll make it right {x2}


He met her in a parking lot, he said his name was 'this'
it was a chance encounter maybe they could try to meet again,
he was in.. every dream, every thought, every waking hour
(he told her everything about him) but he said he had a friend
and it was okay.. because she had alot of 'friends' too,
she met them all around the world,
(maybe he could get through.. the baggage)..
getting through the day alone was too much for their mental to establish
so they turned a little bender to a habbit..
a sensible attraction on the weekends..
by the time the week would end they wouldn't wanna leave the bed
and she had said that he was everything that she would need in men,
even then he wasn't fully ready just to trust her yet..
she was a little younger, and well he was just a fucking wreck
something set him off about the fact that she had lied before,
even just a white lie, it's just enough to pry the door
open for the memories and centapedes to climb aboard..


An angel on the left..
halo on the right..
a little bit of you,
a little me
we'll make it right {x2}


three best friends
'this', 'would never', 'work'..
three best friends,
(they could try to make it work)
three best friends..


he met her in her bedroom, said his name was 'would never'
she replied with "her lips" as a product of her good measure..
(it never was a measurement), it's everything she ever did,
'would never' never lied until the time had come to kiss 'her lips',
bite your tongue, this is it.. this is what you've waited for,
she gave herself to you and now you have to take it, make it more,
make it worth her time and worth the trust that she pulled outta you,
make her feel alive and make her love what she's about to do...
(cloud the room with smiles to evade her insecurities,
emancipate the gaurd that she had carved to hide her purity..)
'Would never' only thought about the negative,
whenever he's around her she's a downer and a sedative..
A second-rate citizen who's drowning in a desolate hell..
I mention it well, because once I used to know 'her lips' well ((lips well))..
Kiss & tell was never on the menu with 'her lips'..
And now this is all you ever get ((this is all that you can get))


An angel on the left..
halo on the right..
a little bit of you,
a little me
we'll make it right {x2}

three best friends
'this', 'would never', 'work'..
three best friends,
(they could try to make it work)
three best friends..


she met him on a call and he had said his name was 'work',
he was cute and kinda funny when he claimed he was a jerk..
he would make her laugh, and they would smile til her stomach hurt,
(something worked in him), he was the one that she was searching for..
they would talk for hours.. he would rearrange her circuit board
eventually.. she would see life how it was meant to be,
mentioning from time to time the time that she would run and hide
from anyone and everyone, (someone tried to get too close),
getting close was all that she had wanted now,
the 'let you go' was what she feared..
good thing... he was always here,
to keep her company, from bad thoughts
and bad dreams.. anyone who'd come between them..
Another season passed and they would gladly find another reason
that they still belong together, (this is how you calm the weather)
(this is how the war is won),
More than one way that they could make it work between them
but I like to think that this is how they reasoned


An angel on the left..
halo on the right..
a little bit of you,
a little me
we'll make it right

((( three best friends
'this', 'would never', 'work'..
three best friends,
(they could try to make it work)
three best friends.. )))

[classthe_king]

I had a hard time following this

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I had a hard time following this

I guess I didn't explain it. Although it sounds like there's one main woman, and the guy characters change, it's actually the opposite. Each verse is 3 different relationships I've been in, with an abstract (yet pretty accurate view) on how I met my exes and how it played out.

[classthe_king]

That actually does help it, and I started catching the flow more the second time I read it.

I don't really understand the this, would never, work though. Is it just off of the sentence "this would never work" as in the relationship, or is there something else to it?

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That actually does help it, and I started catching the flow more the second time I read it.

I don't really understand the this, would never, work though. Is it just off of the sentence "this would never work" as in the relationship, or is there something else to it?

yeah, since it's about me, I didn't want to put in another name so I just used "this would never work" (as in my terrible time with relationships) as the names of the guys. I figured it was more imaginative, lol.

[classthe_king]

oh haha, I wasn't sure about that so yeah

This was probably my favorite bar

something set him off about the fact that she had lied before,
even just a white lie, it's just enough to pry the door

[Atone]

U suck, go die

[WakeUpShow]

U suck, go die

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=110623&hilit=sampler

[Atone]

U suck, go die

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=110623&hilit=sampler

lol, exactly why i said what i said, fuck off,

but truthfully speaking, this sounds like it would be a good song, like a story type thing

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You know my thoughts on this bro. It's a great piece, more so because I picked apart the flow haha. It reminds of something I read once. Poetry, more so, but story telling at its best.

When you get a chance, check my new post here. It's a remake of a song I did once and you didn't like it too much. I changed it quite a bit.