I don't know if it was supposed to be funny, but I lol'd throughout the whole thing. Some lines were good, and some of the rhyming was good, but a lot of the rhyming seemed rushed and incomplete. You should rewrite this just for this part:
I Grew Up a Screw Up , fuck it .. Biggie said that
I'm really Screwed Up , FUCK IT .. Ludacris already did that
I'm a Drug Addict , Dammit , Eminem already pretended that
Song of Anti-Bragging , OH SHIT IT'S ME WHO DID THAT!
That was great haha. I actually enjoy this concept a lot, because it works on so many levels. The only thing I'd critique is the rhyming, since it was scattered and not what I've learned to expect from you.
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