I'm The Reason

[Maybe]

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[VenomBlackViper]

Damn this was as dope as your last one, I especially liked

(huh)... if only I could climb in to a cubicle...
and suffer through a life until it smiles at my funereal...
pile up the "used to knows" they caged me in the dark with...
till' I'm angry at the paintings on the walls of my apartment...
(I've departed... no?) so I'll sing another slow rap...
like this is for the kids with all the wrinkles in their road maps...
and this is for the kids that never get to know what a home is...
and this is for the kids without a morsel of atonement...
(close another door)... we can knock another wall out,
and the sky still standing with the top that never falls down...
watching every thought cloud, to see if I can lift all,
the pieces to the puzzle while they're drowning in the fish bowl...

Although i'm not into shit about love & god this was still a great piece because of your writing skill.

[ArsheyHaq]

In a piece called "My Hate" I wrote:
"and I know you had dreams of a husband and kids, but love is a myth/
bitch, it doesn't exist"

and you wrote:
"and those singing the tune... that 'love is a myth',
and it's something that kids wonder of, but doesn't exist..."

I'LL SEE YOU IN COURT, BUDDY!!

lol naw, just playin'

Anyway, this was some really good shit. Your rhyming is top notch, and you always nail your subject matter perfectly You deserve a lot more feed than you're receiving I think you've become a victim of something called "Being Slept On" haha I liked these lines a lot:

".. they're wrong... (and still I hope to feel the real love...)
so the notebooks in my home are full of poetry I read of,"

"((I can love or keep up with the selfish living...
my deepest cuts are the ones that are self inflicted..."

"(I've departed... no?) so I'll sing another slow rap...
like this is for the kids with all the wrinkles in their road maps...
and this is for the kids that never get to know what a home is...
and this is for the kids without a morsel of atonement..."
^^^I like how you delivered that^^^

Don't let being slept on discourage you. Keep posting cuz I really like your stuff

[Immortal Equinox]

This was good man! Lyrics were heart felt and I like that. Only thing is, sometimes the flow seemed like it slipped up a little bit. Like the syllable count was there. I don't know how to explain it. You should post more though. I'd be glad to read more of your pieces.

[MikeNUFC]

Your stuff flows like a river - the first verse is absolutely insane. Typically great word choice and inventive rhymes, with great internals.

This bit is so clever

(I've departed... no?) so I'll sing another slow rap...
like this is for the kids with all the wrinkles in their road maps...
and this is for the kids that never get to know what home is...
and this is for the kids without a morsel of atonement...

Love how you structured that, with the link beforehand.

I loved the link of word choice throughout as well. (sky > cloud, for eg)

[Ka0t1c]

Very dope bro, I enjoyed your writing style and message on this piece. It got me hype! Thanx

[Maybe]

Thanks for the comments guys... You're too kind, too kind.