Non existing idea (NEI)

[mcZu]

Idealess, beautiful eyes like Isis icing as I
Stand mesmerized, an error lies
As I enter an era of lies, here I reside
Best a side, and aside of my best
I’ve been looking for a side to you I don’t know yet
An aspect in your vocab
I asked her if she genuine or faux, yet
She managed to make me answer
A slow thread, life line hooked to a dancer
My hands are tied, destiny hogtied
It seems my enemies are offside
Locks wide open, dreams unleashed
As I run these thoughts of mischief
In the ground; I reminisce when she kissed me
Meantime my REM is blending in
With my next of kin and I’m handling
My mind state while my mind is demanding
The man in my head to surface
But my mind is purposely looking for a surplus
To over dose my inner me and be sure of
Its demise, and make an end to the lies
When you’re lying and I’m next to you
I hate you, but I’m still lying next to you
So I cherish the moment...


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[mcZu]

Bump.

[mcZu]

Bump.

[Fa-Q]

You probably didnt intent this but I used the "Dumb It Down" flow for this.....great piece and that fit very well actually

[MikeNUFC]

Great work. Rhymes are structured beautifully and they're really interesting. I like the word choice and how you've strayed away from your normal use of similies which would take something away from a piece such as this.

[mcZu]

Thanks for the comments, guys, appreciate it.