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Re: Newest 16

Postby classthe_king » May 4th, '11, 22:51

The rhyming on this was pretty good although at some points it seemed like you were rhyming just to rhyme. Flow was pretty smooth throughout.
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Re: Newest 16

Postby MikeNUFC » May 4th, '11, 22:57

Flowed really smooth. Some cool lines here and there - was just rhyming for the sake of it, but it was a fun read and was sonically great.

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Re: Newest 16

Postby Xray » May 5th, '11, 14:32

Flow was awesome. Dope ass rhyming bro. I love the last two lines, that was the best part!

lol at people saying your rhyming for the sake of it? It's called a "rhyme-scheme". Good shit. :b:
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Re: Newest 16

Postby There Will Be Blood » May 11th, '11, 05:34

you can rhyme. Like others say I would like to see you tackle subject matter. Would be dope.

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Re: Newest 16

Postby Maybe » May 11th, '11, 06:14

Rhyming was top notch, and the flow was impeccable. Like said before me, the content was silly but I get what you're doing, so it's cool. I can tell you've stepped your rhyme game up quite a bit, and also like said above me, I'd like to see you tackle a serious subject matter. Something haggard.
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Re: Newest 16

Postby Tash8 » May 13th, '11, 22:56

Nice vibe, Clarky. You rhymed every word possible it seems like haha.. good shit man. Flow was pretty good from you can tell off a page...but overall nice man, keep blazing hash
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