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The Ending Part 2

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The Ending Part 2

Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '11, 02:00

I'm still here standing on my two feet
and I will deal n manage till the truth brings
a place,
where the illest realist spitters ain't losing
where the villains and the killers ain't true things,
we all related, its with family that we're feuding, (family feud)
its not safe but today, i dont give a fuck i'm out here just to win
maybe with a little luck you'll bite the dust instead
it's a dumb tact to come back to my front pad n want revenge
bitch i'll throw you off the bow like osama bin laden
go back to '92, when Madonna was hot and
run for president and give Dahmer a pardon
have come and find you, hide you unda his carpet
ain't you learned your lesson?
the best are both aggressive and reserved to keep you guessing
regress is for the lazy depress is for the weak
impress is for the showoff and the best wont even sleep

appreciate it

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Re: The Ending Part 2

Postby B.A.D. » May 18th, '11, 13:35

hey man, when are you going to record a new song??

I'm lookin forward to hearin something from you soon man. been a long time

do you still produce?
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Re: The Ending Part 2

Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '11, 18:18

Big Ax-D wrote:hey man, when are you going to record a new song??

I'm lookin forward to hearin something from you soon man. been a long time

do you still produce?


yeah man, i been doing everything just haven't posted shit, im me if u down to collab on a song or sumtin
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Re: The Ending Part 2

Postby MikeNUFC » May 18th, '11, 21:11

Rhyming was really nice and it flowed pretty well - I don't really like ending a bar mid-sentence to force the rhyme ("madonna was hot and") but apart from that it was good.

Last two lines were really good.
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Re: The Ending Part 2

Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '11, 22:01

MikeNUFC wrote:Rhyming was really nice and it flowed pretty well - I don't really like ending a bar mid-sentence to force the rhyme ("madonna was hot and") but apart from that it was good.

Last two lines were really good.


thanks man, i'm not the biggest fan of that either but occasionally i think it's ok. :happy:
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