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Your Fuckin' Head Split

Postby Xray » May 23rd, '11, 06:54

Been years since I wrote 3 verses for a song.

Move out the way I'm like an ambulance
Sample this, choke the amulets on your necklace
and your just next cause I'm dangerous
The most turbulent, murder it in direct
Words spread colder than murders in Tibet
Off the highest ratings, exile datings
I split smiles so vile till your face is out of style
And your race stinks while your face stings
And it's humiliating when you face things
It's common taste when the chocolate breaks
I got you rocking shades like the cotton days
And your coffin pays what the goblin takes
I got you guzzling your age, turn to god for grace
When I displace your modern for forgotten days
Straight off the case cartridges
Shooting at car bridges with temperatures
of the shells leveraging cold oxygens
Chill and murdering

I'm twice the man I'm van damme
Kidnappin every damn man in my van
Y'all dont understand my master lock plans like stans in cages
These pans are racist when my hand races
Go from white to black fades the way my plan phases
My reflex database basics is that of great placements
Everythings slow and splashed like I flashed my head in the matrix
Y'all went from glad to bad habitats to bad maps
From bad raps to bad rappers facin rapid gas from my fluid ass
And I'm fluent at last when my influence is as clear as this ruined glass
I come brewing fast, I'll take your system out like spewing bags
I catch rappers with my boogers when I pick on them
Yall sneeze out organs when I push on it
Lay you ten flat like you dreamt that
Motherfuckers musta been high when they said that
Show up with a blade where you rest at
Why you dress black? why you dress tag?
I just wear the flag of frags where you lag to lack
So just bite this foot' curb in half
and face the path of my footprints wrath


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Edit: Removed the first verse and edited the third verse aka second verse.
Last edited by Xray on Jun 3rd, '11, 11:16, edited 1 time in total.
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Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: Your Fuckin' Head Split

Postby yoshi » May 23rd, '11, 13:38

Me likes. You plan on recording it? :flutter:

You're the instruments cause y'all blow like chicks

Made me lol.
Maybe wrote:I'm so awesome, I don't mind looking desperate.

Chet wrote:Fuck House. If I wanted to watch a sarcastic person in the medical field, I would stalk Yoshi :8)
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Re: Your Fuckin' Head Split

Postby MikeNUFC » May 23rd, '11, 20:29

Flowed really well, rhyming went from average to great and there were some cool punchlines. A couple of boring similies here and there but overall it was an enjoyable read. 2nd verse was best. Good stuff man
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Re: Your Fuckin' Head Split

Postby Xray » Jun 3rd, '11, 11:16

Uppin.
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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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