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Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby No Way Out » May 24th, '11, 23:53

Lol This Was Originally 2 Dumbass Freestyles i Spit in November 2010 ....... It Sooon Became My new Style. Last Song Im Gonna drop Until Their Actually Recorded

& Dont mind the Chorus

the beat:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VBTeZF89HaI


Chorus: X2 (Singing)
All this weed is so mind numbing
You Only got a joint? No guys i dont mind puffing
Im in love with mary jane im practically eye humping
Are you alive? your showing no signs of it...

Verse 1 :
I Always Put a Joint in the bowl of my bong
take FATTER hits than rosie O' don
Watch it grow legs & just mosey alongggg
then try to take the lighter that i hold in my palm, uh
mom says im paranoid, i should really drop the weed
i dont sit on my couch cause the TV's been watching me
i looked outside my window and seen my house
this is the kinda sci-fi u can only read about
my imaginary friends always kick my ass
so i burned down the house and i hid the axe
i see ghosts in my room, they smoke my weed
i act like i lost it but i guess the jokes on me
the more i go to school, the dumber i get
my mom started calling me a stupid son of a bitch
so i started stealing gas ta, get me some dough
and i blew myself up when i lit up a smoke

Chorus X2
Maybe wrote:This is pretty damn good. For what it is, a simple, smooth flowing punch-line verse, it's perfect. You didn't miss a single rhyme, and the content was amusing. Good stuff man, really good.

10/10

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NWO, for short...

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Re: Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby Steve Spag » May 25th, '11, 00:03

Hahaha, sick!
Love the rhyme-scheme, and the storytelling aspect of it was superb. The flow was awesome, I caught on right away and you had a good choice of beat to spit it on! The hook was pretty awesome too, definitely some fresh shit, I'd totally be interested in doing a song to this with you!
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Re: Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby Maybe » May 25th, '11, 01:23

The flow wasn't bad, but not as good as what I've seen from you before.

Otherwise, the story was amusing and obscure. It was funny, and contently rhythmic. Some great lines with entertaining concepts blended perfectly to create a fun, generally great verse.

9/10.

You're putting some good stuff up here, keep it up.
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Re: Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby Drug.Ballad » May 25th, '11, 15:36

i dont sit on my couch cause the TV's been watching me


I really liked that line.
And your storytelling and flow were really good :y:
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Re: Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby ArsheyHaq » May 28th, '11, 21:25

Haha really funny, witty stuff right here. Here were some of my favorites:

"mom says im paranoid, i should really drop the weed
i dont sit on my couch cause the TV's been watching me"

"i see ghosts in my room, they smoke my weed
i act like i lost it but i guess the jokes on me
the more i go to school, the dumber i get
my mom started calling me a stupid son of a bitch"

Dunno if this'll offend you or what, but it reminded me a lot of Em's early stuff. SSLP-era, like My House and/or When To Stand Up
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Re: Mind Numbing Lyrics

Postby FreeSpeech » May 29th, '11, 06:00

Haha I liked it, I liked the Rosie lines, I hate that ho muffin.
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