Sound Off

[WakeUpShow]

INSTRUMENTAL: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qXbBV4v3D0E

Fail to judge me....you know it's Trial and Error
I hope you caught the stench of death in my smile of terror
It's hard not to generalize, all your general lies
My medical eyes saw decimal size and federal ties
Salute me, for never changing with the tides
When it's all said and done, you'll be hanging with your guys!
My music is always followed by a "Turn the sound up!"
I treat ganja like construction, getting higher from the ground-up
I'll Introduce you to the Slaughterhouse
Only let ya leave when you realize what I'm all about!
I'm the dictionary's definition of relentless
You're everybody's definition of defenseless
The detective told me to clean up my act
So I brought bleach to my next murder scene in a bag!



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[WakeUpShow]

That's dope, man, not better than your previous work but that was dope
Flow was incredible, multi's are great in usual, loved the wordplay there "generalize/general lies"
Rhyme scheme was incredible, as well

My music is always followed by a "Turn the sound up!"
I treat ganja like construction, getting higher from the ground-up

That was fucking dope, man, just incredible



Keep up the good work, man!

ha thanks man, means alot. I'll check your piece out when I get a few mins.

[Atone]

love the flow with this, i actually rapped it out loud and it would sound dope as hell on a tape, put a good beat to it man, i think anything written should be put on audio and it would sound better, this is good shit tho man

[ArsheyHaq]

This is some really, really dope stuff good work, man! My personal favorites (even though the whole thing was flames):

'My music is always followed by a "Turn the sound up!"
I treat ganja like construction, getting higher from the ground-up'

haha very clever

"I'm the dictionary's definition of relentless
You're everybody's definition of defenseless
The detective told me to clean up my act
So I brought bleach to my next murder scene in a bag!"

I love how you ended that, perfect finisher

Edit: actually, after a second read it seems like there was quite a bit of filler.. You should definitely take the dopest lines you can come up with and pack 'em into a giant verse. That would also help with how your short your verses always seem to be (I know, I know, I shouldn't talk haha).

[WakeUpShow]

This is some really, really dope stuff good work, man! My personal favorites (even though the whole thing was flames):

'My music is always followed by a "Turn the sound up!"
I treat ganja like construction, getting higher from the ground-up'

haha very clever

"I'm the dictionary's definition of relentless
You're everybody's definition of defenseless
The detective told me to clean up my act
So I brought bleach to my next murder scene in a bag!"

I love how you ended that, perfect finisher

Edit: actually, after a second read it seems like there was quite a bit of filler.. You should definitely take the dopest lines you can come up with and pack 'em into a giant verse. That would also help with how your short your verses always seem to be (I know, I know, I shouldn't talk haha).

thanks alot man! and yeah i know I'm guilty of wanting to put out my best lines and falling victim to filler haha. i may do that, make like a 24 of my best shit. thanks again man, it's very appreciated.