Just fuckin around

[Fa-Q]

You should realize that real eyes idolize my idol eyes,
Try and hit me below the belt until I get that title prize,
My high horse, has potty mouth, where the bridle lies,
I gave him the Koran once, and a fuckin Bible twice,
He rides past all girls, crossed a tease and capitalized,
And titty fucked, witty ducks, with breasts apple sized,
And I got four fathers, that were never fore fathers,
They're all alcoholics, in the world that four more martyrs,
Their poor daughters, are grown, and they poor waters,
In white T-shirts, so i might see flirts in tight knee skirts,
Tell who I found in a River in Phoenix, it was River Phoenix,
In his asshole, was a whole asshole and withered three dicks,
Saw his Brother walking, drunk courting Jennette McCurdy,
I (court her) knowing shes a dime, I make her wet 'n flirty,
I met her early, so we could menaj' with Ariana Grande,
Marry on Sunday, carry on Monday, get Katy Perry on one day,
I'm back cocksuckers

[Fa-Q]

Bumppppp

[Maybe]

I liked it a lot. The rhyming was great, the style was funny and entertaining, and the flow (although slightly forced) was tight, and well refined.

My only real qualms are with your rhyme-scheme in general. Although great on paper, reading aloud makes me feel like it would sound odd and off-beat on a proper instrumental. Maybe it's because I didn't write it, but regardless, it wouldn't take a huge verbal sacrifice to adjust this piece for music.

The whole thing in general... I'd give you a 9/10 if that matters. Excellent stuff, though.

[Fa-Q]

Garcias, Maybe and Geno

[Delicious Girl]

lol this made me laugh mad funny.

[ArsheyHaq]

Damn, can't believe I didn't see this! This was a nice little gem to find on a board that seems to be dying (all the vets are leaving). Stick around, and post more often We need talent like yours around. Anyway:

"He rides past all girls, crossed a tease and capitalized,"

Didn't get that one until Geno pointed out he liked it, then I read it over haha

Overall, I liked a lot of the rhyming, and the flow was crazy. My only complaint is that you're a little weird for your avatar lol

[Enimee]

this is dope, very eminemesque, i liked all the wordplay and such couple with consistent rhyme schemes. shit was ill for shure keep doin shit like this and once u get it perfected you'll be ridiculous. I'd have to agree with Maybe, it does seem forced in areas where you might have strechted a few concepts but in alll if you widen your vocab a bit itll smoothen out and flow better in coordination, but solid work for sure good shit

[Block]

Hmm.. Not bad. You haven't written in a minute, huh?

The wordplay in here seems very asher roth inspired. Just done a lot heavier than I've heard from him. Good stuff for your first piece back, bro. Although, and this is purely just my preference in writing, I would have elaborated more on the wordplays (with more imagery) if that doesn't make sense just hit me back.

Again, good shit man.

And yo, if you can hit up my latest piece, it hasn't gotten much feed. Thanks man.