VBV - Go To Hell

[VenomBlackViper]

My name rings Hells Bells when you speak of the Devil
Toot my own Devil horns & feel your feet start to tremble
This is the end of the road, i'm glad you made it
If you're brothers in arms you can all get amputated
I'll make you bite the bullets you're sweating
The trigger's similar to a bad show, if I pull it it's ending
My sulfuric stomach acid mutates butterflies to poisonous moths
When it comes time to pay my respects i'm avoiding the costs
Smoking bomb weed out of a peace pipe
About to reignite the tree of life
Reaching for the higher stars with a firearm
Fire power & star power combined, so when I shoot for the stars
I blow up Jupiter & Mars
As a baby I didn't sleep in cribs I was kept in holding cells
2nd grade, revealing government secrets for show & tell
I don't give a fuck if you're heaven sent you can still to go to hell

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[VenomBlackViper]

Awesome. This is the kinda thing I like writing about.

I just enjoyed it a lot.

VBV & Geno collab coming soon?

[Pllumi]

awesome, especially this one ,,Reaching for the higher stars with a firearm,,

[Raids-God]

Punchlines hit hard, that was pretty good shit man
Stay at it

[WinstonMARX]

You've came a long way but if you were a bit more consistent you'd be set.

Best Part(s):
If you're brothers in arms you can all get amputated

As a baby I didn't sleep in cribs I was kept in holding cells
2nd grade, revealing government secrets for show & tell

Worst Part(s):
Reaching for the higher stars with a firearm
Fire power & star power combined, so when I shoot for the stars
I blow up Jupiter & Mars

Keep it up.

[Atone]

You've came a long way but if you were a bit more consistent you'd be set.

Best Part(s):
If you're brothers in arms you can all get amputated

As a baby I didn't sleep in cribs I was kept in holding cells
2nd grade, revealing government secrets for show & tell

Worst Part(s):
Reaching for the higher stars with a firearm
Fire power & star power combined, so when I shoot for the stars
I blow up Jupiter & Mars

Keep it up.

Agreed, your really good venom, never really expected this lol

honestly if you think about it, half the writers on this forum need record deals lol, this forum is full of dudes who got more talent than alot of what comes from these mainstream rappers you hear these days.

[flyingmonkey10]

motherfucker, get a hot beat and spit that shit like your life depended on it

loved the last line. does justice to all types of writing in all forms.

[VenomBlackViper]

Appreciate all the feed guys

[Mooks]

Damn man...that was good. Ill take tips from you.

[Yah-hah]

Heard this before homie secrets safe with me

[VenomBlackViper]

Heard this before homie secrets safe with me

[classthe_king]

It started off sick but then it kind of fell off. Like Cole said, you need to be more consistent

[WakeUpShow]

Punches were awesome as usual, but you fell victim to filler as I usually do. I like the dark content and the rhyming, but the flow was messy. Think you could hit my piece up?

[VenomBlackViper]

Edited this a bit to make some punches better.

[EyeQ200]

This is great, kept the theme going, it got "weaker" towards the end but i wouldn't say that it "fell off" because you came with the heat all the way through.
The only thing i can say i wasn't a fan of, was the last line, it wasn't the line itself, but it just didn't seem to end the verse right, if you understand what i'm getting at? It was more of a mid-verse rhyme, rather than something to wrap a verse up with, other than that, keep at it