Improving?

[Man1x]

Incredible Feud -

Inevitable nudity, that's what I'm known for/
Incredible lube, masturbating after I was shown a whore/
If she don't give me head, take my shotgun and blown outa door/
If I miss? Smash her into the floor, leaving blood and gore/


Okay I put that in the multi rhyme subject and I thought it was a step up from what I did before on my homophobic freestyle and all the other shit I wrote before that. Opinions and suggestions?

[Man1x]

Thanks, I'll have to try that cause usually just write something random and then use that to get to the next line.

[Vettori]

write your lines backwards

Way to give away the Big secret HAHA j/k, yea its a Very useful Tactic.

[Sam.]

try this
viewtopic.php?f=6&t=101335