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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby BILI » Jun 17th, '11, 21:28

Dope verse Geno...if only Menzo was able to write his...and yeah Menzo was supposed to be in it thats why I mentioned him.
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby Innovation » Jun 17th, '11, 23:46

You both did your thing on here. Awesome drop guys. :y:

Geno, you're actually one of my favourite writers on this website. Probably a surprise as I've never really given feed on your writing before lol.

Although not by much, I did prefer your verse on this. In my opinion the multi's were crafted better and the rhyming was solid throughout. Taking nothing away from you though, BILI. You had a great verse, you had quite a few good bars and I liked the constant rhyming pattern you had going on.

Favourites bars from both of you:

Wreakin' peace is my motto, I'm a spiritual God-send
Leave you in pieces if you ain't feelin my lyrical content

Very well crafted multi.

Bili, Menzo and Geno, nobody`s stopping us
Try chopping us, GO CRAZY, but you aint topping us

An energetic feel to it - good rhyming.

But yeah, really liked the drop.

If you guys could hit me back with some feed on mine and C.R.E.A.M's collab, that'd be awesome. viewtopic.php?f=24&t=116759
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby BILI » Jun 19th, '11, 00:46

thx guys :y:
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jun 19th, '11, 02:05

Geno, your piece flows amazingly to the beat, shit was beyond orgasmic. Great use of multies too both in your verse & the hook. I liked your delivery too. :shifty:

Favorite lines

Always been doing this on my own with no help,
And for days I've been ruined, not knowing myself,
I'm dazed and confused, slowly goin' to hell,
I'm insane that's a fact - only tame when I'm mad,
And I'm just a day away from blowin' my brain in my lap,

BILI, while Genos verse was better yours was still good, flowed well to the beat however your flow could be worked on more, the multies were a bit basic however they worked & I wouldn't say anything about them if I wasn't giving feedback. Also writing something as smh did confuse me a bit, I had to pause the song cuz it fucked me up. :sweating:

Favorite lines

This bullshit is making me crazy, I`m kicking the walls
I`m bad now? But when I get famous you`ll be LICKING MY BALLS
But is that really my thing? Do I want to become a TV king?
Fuck NO, I hope you`ll never see me sing, only see me swing
Just to see me diss rich, I`m already getting tired of THIS BITCH!!!
WHERE CAN I TURN OFF THIS SWITCH?!

Both of you stuck to the concept of "fuck being famous" well even though I thought from the name this would be some funny, fucking with you type shit.

Great piece both of you. :y:
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby BILI » Jun 20th, '11, 11:05

thx Menzo :y:
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Jun 21st, '11, 10:29

BILI was on some Shady SHIZZNET!
The devil ain't on a level same as him!
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby Block » Jun 21st, '11, 21:32

Hmm.. I've underestimated both of you as writers.

Geno: Your choice of words is great. I love when people choose words that aid the flow. A lot of people don't do that, but you do it really well. Leading me to my next point: Your flow is great. The content is great, as well. It suits the title beautifully, lol.

Bili: Your flow was a little more bland than Geno's, but was stille great. Your multies kinda stuck out more, they weren't a fluid in comparison. That's not to say that it wasn't good, though.
Your verse is a braggadocio-type, "fuck you" which suits the track. Good shit.

Overall, good shit from both of you. Hit me back, bros.
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Re: Geno ft. BILI - Get Mad

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 23rd, '11, 07:10

I know you guys don't really need my input cuz you've heard it enough haha but this was hot! I wish Menzo woulda dropped his verse on it too though cuz it kinda felt like it was missing one more person/perspective. But you both went in equally hard, and this was a fresh topic. Good work. :y:
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