Girl Troubles

[ArsheyHaq]

I was polite, at first, and acted gentlemanly (pardon?)/
then changed for reasons I don't comprehend fully, my darling/
I know how much you meant to me, yet I've been silly regardless/
but it's never like I ever intentionally argued/
you'd egg me on, you know it, don't tempt me to get started!/
you know how you can get..you can't sensibly be bargained/
but I'll give you your credentials..your menstruals play a part in it/
and cuz of recent events eventually we parted/
and I don't like to bother with all this sentimental garbage/
but you were meant for me, sent for me, a guardian!/
an angel from above that would mend me of my heartache/
you would tend to me and always extended me an arm if/
I needed someone to vent to..you'd turn me tender when I hardened/
you're detrimental to my health or I'll go mentally retarded/
I feel empty now..what I did was accidental and I'm sorry/
I never meant to go this far..I'm just sendin' my regards/
Sincerely,
Arshey





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[ArsheyHaq]

Sorry, I know this is hella old, but this got no feedback at all haha so BUMP!

[Ka0t1c]

Very intelligent writing, I must admit I've been asleep and id like to read more, btw don't be afraid to look up my lyrics as well, great read!

[ArsheyHaq]

Thanks! And Ka0t1c, I haven't seen anything from you in a while. Show me the last time you've posted and I'll be more than happy to feed.

I liked this, the rhyme scheme was great.

True story?

Yes, it was. Could you tell?

[Enimee]

i was definitly moved by this lol. it was real good the way you set up every line was very creative and you didnt have to stretch, it flowed perfectly as if the words you used are the only words that could describe the situation and they just so happen to rhyme...hot shit

[ArsheyHaq]

Thanks, Enimee. This is probably my most favorite verse that I've written.