Think Twice

[classthe_king]

I wrote this in like an hour, you don't even need to feed it I just felt like I should post something since most of the shit I'm writing I'm saving for audio. It'll probably be hard to flow without the beat but shit happens.


Could sucka Mc’s… please think twice
Before you say some wrong shit and get your CD sliced
This ain’t for you and your girlfriend to bump in ya Audi
This is what murders listen to when they’re dumpin the body
What… you just think it’s for fun, it’s a hobby
You don’t think I’m lovin this? Man, nothin can stop me
My teacher told me nothin rhymed with orange
So I through her corpse in the morgue then
Screwed four inch nails in the door hinge
That’s the shit I’m on
I gotta hit the bong and blow ‘fore I rip a song
I’m a tickin bomb about to blow in yo damn state
Battlin me is a slippery slope so I can’t break
If your man hates it’s only cause when you went down on me last weekend
I told him it was decent
So be careful when you’re out and about
One punch and you’re Mrs. Dracula, down for the count


http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=117278&p=1683310#p1683310

[DƎRDYPK]

Damn Based Rob

[VenomBlackViper]

Loved the Mrs. Dracula line.
Wasn't really feeling the rest of this though, it just felt like a giant filler verse to me. Nothing stood out or made me go "damn!!!" besides the very last punch which was great.

[WakeUpShow]

I agree with VBV, it was sorta boring but that's not to say the flow and rhymes weren't great, because they were. The Dracula line was fucking awesome.

[ArsheyHaq]

You got skill, and make this look EASY. But I gotta agree with everyone else, it seems like you're too focused on the audio aspect of rhyming and forgetting about the lyrics...they're suffering as a result

Anyway, check out Nightmare on Sesame Street if you got time. We'd love some more feed

EDIT: After reading it again, I love this line more than the count line:

"This ain’t for you and your girlfriend to bump in ya Audi
This is what murders listen to when they’re dumpin the body"

[Enimee]

good shyt class as always, very consistent and had a real dark feel to it, i like it man good verse lol i dont think ive heard a dracula line like that before shit was creative. and ur rhyme theme in the beginning was DOOPE lol

[WakeUpShow]

Oh yeah, DON'T waste that dracula punch! Use it in an audio piece.

[classthe_king]

Thanks for the feed, but yeah this was basically just me working on my flow, I'll write a piece for y'all that will look better on text. And I didn't even think that count punch was good I just through it at the end for filler lol


I'll return feed on monday

[WakeUpShow]

Not to be the nit-picker, but it's threw

[mdemaz]

Sentus doing his thang.
I liked the content and stuff, good luck on the flow tweaking.

[BILI]

yeah that last line was the best...some nice mutlies...but other then that you can do much better...oh and I was flowing it perfect until that orange thing,and after the door hinge it was back again

[classthe_king]

Thanks yall

[classthe_king]

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=120769

There's the punchline in audio for you guys

[Devil'sAdvocate]

My teacher told me nothin rhymed with orange
So I through her corpse in the morgue then
Screwed four inch nails in the door hinge

get yo stan ass the fuck outta here b.

[Solace]

My teacher told me nothin rhymed with orange
So I through her corpse in the morgue then
Screwed four inch nails in the door hinge

get yo stan ass the fuck outta here b.

Lol I knew someone would say that..But trust DA, he's never even watched that interview.