VBV & EyeQ200 - Poisonous Thoughts

[VenomBlackViper]

Collab I did with the homie EyeQ.

EyeQ:

Even blind men can realise the real lies with their real eyes,
Then recognise crowns of thorns dont belong in heavens skies.
Venom's not writing (right in) his mind, the voices did that,
He can be two of a kind, Hannah Montana where you at?
This is the realist rendition T R has ever saw,
Viewing costs tuition, as the dopest two go toe to toe,
knife to knife, gun fight fright, showdowns at midnights,
ready tonight, with a sharpened dildo for anybody acting tight.
Renegades only afraid of a razor blade that's handmade,
pulling out a hand grenade to serenade those who crusade..
against us, we restless, running creative writing, never breathless,
don't test us, i got your mothers body chopped up in my lexus
No room in the bus trunk, thats where my bunk mates lie
I fought the whole hood (fort hood), so hell's where i'll reside
When i'm dead, burried and gone, TR will know i'm alive,
Because my parters the devil, imma give the mic to him for five.

VBV:

Freakin right, Boogeyman outside your window giving you the creeps at night
Mutate your ant farm to begbugs, leeches & lice
Strap you to bed with a straightjacket to keep you sleeping tight
Bad seed in a rotten apple with tapeworms eatin' a bite
Fruit of hard labor withering the tree of life
Fuck Christmas past i'm the spirit of written rap
Rancid serpent grabbing random persons out of abandoned hearses
Using plastic surgeons to transmit verses
Got mind control for even the finest souls
I'll grasp your thoughts with a sudden hold
My concerts ain't live performances, they're puppet shows
Don't raise spirits I down them in the belly of the beast, got over a hundred souls
Being digested in my stomach rolls
You crash & burn, I just go up in smoke
Fuck a key to your heart, i'm destroyin' the locks
Venom & EyeQ, sick in the head having poisonous thoughts

Not sure why I feel the need to explain this but if the last line went over anyones head (which honestly it shouldn't ) it's a play on both of our names (Venom = poison & EyeQ = IQ = brainpower = thoughts) & now back to our scheduled programming.

EyeQ Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=117886
VBV Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=117419

[EyeQ200]

Fuck a key to your heart, i'm destroyin' the locks
Venom & EyeQ, sick in the head having poisonous thoughts

Not sure why I feel the need to explain this but if the last line went over anyones head (which honestly it shouldn't ) it's a play on both of our names (Venom = poison & EyeQ = IQ = brainpower = thoughts) & now back to our scheduled programming.

[Blu]

Holy shit. These verses were INCREDIBLE.

Rancid serpent grabbing random persons out of abandoned hearses
Using plastic surgeons to transmit verses

,
He can be two of a kind, Hannah Montana where you at?

ready tonight, with a sharpened dildo for anybody acting tight.

Favorite lines.

VBV you wanna collab? I'll send you a verse and tell me what you think about it. I'm trying to get my horror core blood pumping.

[EyeQ200]

Thanks Blue
I'll leave Venom reply to that anyway, more towards him

[Blu]

Thanks Blue
I'll leave Venom reply to that anyway, more towards him

Yeah you're welcome.
Nah, if you're down to collab too, then that's perfect, you can join. Ahaha.
The more the merrier man.

[VenomBlackViper]

Sure i'm in a collab mood lately anyways, hit me with what you got & we'll go from there.

[EyeQ200]

Thanks Blue
I'll leave Venom reply to that anyway, more towards him

Yeah you're welcome.
Nah, if you're down to collab too, then that's perfect, you can join. Ahaha.
The more the merrier man.

I'm down for whatever, but if you wanna collab with Venom that's fine, i won't be offended

[Fleka]

You guys are being forum-ass rappers
Hopeing on gaining some followers, masses
Of Fans, Stans, groupies and bitches
Couse the plan is to gain fortune and riches
Plus being vicious, and focused on missions
Of destroying the rappers with crazy precision
Killing and and leaving no fucking evidence
Couse fuckers been messing with higher intelligence


Sooo, how is that for my first time? I never wrote anything, and English is not my language. Give it to me straight, I can take it.

[EyeQ200]

You guys are being forum-ass rappers
Hopeing on gaining some followers, masses of
Fans, Stans, groupies and bitches
Couse the plan is to gain fortune and riches
Plus being vicious, and focused on missions
Of destroying the rappers with crazy precision
Killing and and leaving no fucking evidence
Couse fuckers been messing with higher intelligence


Sooo, how is that for my first time? I never wrote anything, and English is not my language. Give it to me straight, I can take it.

Bitch dissed us and then wanted feedback!

[VenomBlackViper]

You guys are being forum-ass rappers
Hopeing on gaining some followers, masses of
Fans, Stans, groupies and bitches
Couse the plan is to gain fortune and riches
Plus being vicious, and focused on missions
Of destroying the rappers with crazy precision
Killing and and leaving no fucking evidence
Couse fuckers been messing with higher intelligence


Sooo, how is that for my first time? I never wrote anything, and English is not my language. Give it to me straight, I can take it.

Bitch dissed us and then wanted feedback!

But it sucked so much I took it as a compliment.
Thanks for the kind words Fleka.

[Fleka]

I did not diss you, I wrote you are the rappers that destroy bitches with a precision and get rich and get the bitches and fans. But you start here, on this forum.

The part calling me a bitch was not nice, but i forgive you.

So, it sucked hard, even for my first?

[VenomBlackViper]

If you want serious feedback: I've seen people do worse for their first time so it was pretty good for a first. However you need to work on multies (hopefully you know what those are) since you used all 1 syllable rhymes. Also "rappers" & "masses of" does not rhyme at all.

[EyeQ200]

I did not diss you, I wrote you are the rappers that destroy bitches with a precision and get rich and get the bitches and fans. But you start here, on this forum.

The part calling me a bitch was not nice, but i forgive you.

So, it sucked hard, even for my first?

For a first it was fine, needs improvement though

[Fleka]

If you want serious feedback: I've seen people do worse for their first time so it was pretty good for a first. However you need to work on multies (hopefully you know what those are) since you used all 1 syllable rhymes. Also "rappers" & "masses of" does not rhyme at all.

You guys are being forum-ass rappers
Hopeing on gaining some followers, masses
Of Fans, Stans, groupies and bitches
Couse the plan is to gain fortune and riches
Plus being vicious, and focused on missions
Of destroying the rappers with crazy precision
Killing and and leaving no fucking evidence
Couse fuckers been messing with higher intelligence

Now it`s better.

Yeah, I should give it a bit more time and more practice. This was done in few minutes just for the fuck of it, I was bored.

Thanks for the feedback.

[VenomBlackViper]

Well "rappers" & "masses" still doesn't really rhyme.