VBV & EyeQ200 - Poisonous Thoughts

[Fleka]

Well "rappers" & "masses" still doesn't really rhyme.

Ok, ok, forget I wrote it. Jeeeeeeeez. I give up. I`ll cancel my "Stained Window Bus" world tour.

[ArsheyHaq]

Awesome stuff, guys. You guys do some top notch stuff when it comes to punches

EyeQ200, I really liked your bragging rhymes. They hit hard!

"Viewing costs tuition, as the dopest two go toe to toe" That was dope, wish I thought of it

"Renegades only afraid of a razor blade that's handmade,
pulling out a hand grenade to serenade those who crusade.." I just love the way that sounded

One thing though..do you not rap using multis?

VBV, I could tell you were focusing more on multis here than your patented punchlines (not to say there weren't any punches, cuz you had just as many as usual). I liked it, you should keep your style moving in this direction.

"Rancid serpent grabbing random persons out of abandoned hearses
Using plastic surgeons to transmit verses " that was too sick, man!

"Bad seed in a rotten apple with tapeworms eatin' a bite" The wordplay here is brilliant.

One thing I'm starting to not like, and notice more and more of, is your filler line using some kind of insect lol In this case, your mutating leeches and lice line. You always have some sort of bar about doing something to an insect and I gotta admit it's my least favorite of your verses It brings the rhyme scheme down and seems like an obvious filler.

P.S. EyeQ200, I like that you're bumping a lot of slept-on threads (I guess), but it would make more sense if you actually feed them as well. You know, instead of just telling others to.

[EyeQ200]

One thing though..do you not rap using multis?

I don't really concentrate on them as of now, i'm not brilliant writer and i'm trying to work through things peice by peice, and i'm not fluent enough yet with my punches and content in order to incorperate multies too

P.S. EyeQ200, I like that you're bumping a lot of slept-on threads (I guess), but it would make more sense if you actually feed them as well. You know, instead of just telling others to.

Yeah sorry about that, thing was i bumped a lot of Venom's work with feed and wanted to bump back up the newer work people had that didn't have much feed on them, i'm planning to go back and edit my bump posts into feedback at some point

[VenomBlackViper]

About the insect thing, where else did I do it exactly?
Inb4 I make an entire verse just rapping about insects.

[EyeQ200]

Inb4 me & Venom make an eight legged freak collab

[ArsheyHaq]

VBV, in 'Freak of Nature':

"I'm freezing packs of polar bears & burning mate fireflies"

In 'Greetings From Hell':

"Shove a radioactive spider up your ass & see if the bugging transmits"

In 'Go To Hell':

"My sulfuric stomach acid mutates butterflies to poisonous moths"

Lol that's what I was talking about when I said you always seem to be doing something with/to insects. I'm sure people love it, but it's just my personal opinion that it feels like it's filler/conveniently there to rhyme with the next doper line. But do what you do, man

[VenomBlackViper]

The other 2 were basically filler but "My sulfuric stomach acid mutates butterflies to poisonous moths" wasn't filler at all, I personally loved that line. To break it down in case maybe you didn't get it.

Stomach acid is what dissolves food
Sulfuric acid is a poisonous type of acid chemical
Having butterflies in your stomach is a common expression for being nervous
I'm sure you know the similarities & differences between moths & butterflies

So I combined all four of those into one line. When I thought of that line I loved it, one of my personal favorites.

Also I have 2 bug mentions in this verse, don't forget the tapeworm in the rotten apple.

[ArsheyHaq]

To break it down in case maybe you didn't get it.

Stomach acid is what dissolves food
Sulfuric acid is a poisonous type of acid chemical
Having butterflies in your stomach is a common expression for being nervous
I'm sure you know the similarities & differences between moths & butterflies

Oh, I get it. That's very clever.

[VenomBlackViper]

To break it down in case maybe you didn't get it.

Stomach acid is what dissolves food
Sulfuric acid is a poisonous type of acid chemical
Having butterflies in your stomach is a common expression for being nervous
I'm sure you know the similarities & differences between moths & butterflies

Oh, I get it. That's very clever.

Inb4sarcasm

[ArsheyHaq]

To break it down in case maybe you didn't get it.

Stomach acid is what dissolves food
Sulfuric acid is a poisonous type of acid chemical
Having butterflies in your stomach is a common expression for being nervous
I'm sure you know the similarities & differences between moths & butterflies

Oh, I get it. That's very clever.

Inb4sarcasm

Lol what? Not at all, bro. You know I think you're dope!

[Dr.Dope]

@ venom
Are you who i think you are?

[EyeQ200]

I have to say, it did look like sarcasm with the two consecutive short sentences and actual use of full stops

[Enimee]

yo wtf! where yall been at this shit was hard yo, some of the most creative lines ive seen from either of you for real, the flow was pretty much flawless from begining to end and you definitly completed all your concepts and built up every line well, i like how neither of you followed a set bar for bar scheme and were more sporadic with your flows, throwin in mulits randomly to pic the tempo up in certain places, it was defnitly executed perfectly and yall had some nasty wordplay up in this bitch

im surprised and very interested to see more from both of you keep this shit up bois and you'll be golden i have no ill words for this i cant see anything i would do differently..id love to hear it audio and see what yall can make it though for real

[EyeQ200]

Thanks a lot, appreciate it very much, nice for one of the posts to be all positive

[VenomBlackViper]

@ venom
Are you who i think you are?

Depends on who you think I am.