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Forever Is Over

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Re: Forever Is Over

Postby BigBoss » Jul 20th, '11, 03:32

krayzy wrote:I said I'd love them forever
felt so good when they said it back
And to this day i had never
thought one day it would hurt so bad
They take me as I'm joking
not true if as i lie
in my bed growing colder
Truly ready to die
Forever is over.



what the hell are you even talking about?

its like you just got random words and put them together in a emotional way.
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Re: Forever Is Over

Postby Mr Change » Jul 20th, '11, 07:04

SWEET_TOOTH wrote:
krayzy wrote:I said I'd love them forever
felt so good when they said it back
And to this day i had never
thought one day it would hurt so bad
They take me as I'm joking
not true if as i lie
in my bed growing colder
Truly ready to die
Forever is over.



what the hell are you even talking about?

its like you just got random words and put them together in a emotional way.


Dude...you suck at criticism.



I don't really know what the subject is either, maybe you can elaborate? It sounds good though just wish I knew what it was about :y:
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Haters started to appreciate my art
And it just breaks my heart to look at all the pain I caused
But what am I gonna do when the rage is gone?
And the lights go out in that trailer park?"
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Re: Forever Is Over

Postby Sam. » Jul 20th, '11, 11:13

it's really good worthy enough to play the role of a hook in some song .
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