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Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 20th, '11, 06:28

This was inspired by some of the writers on the board. I was totally channeling SajN's 'A Terrorist Attack' and EyeQ200's 'Flight 103' while doing this. Wish I could've collabed with at least one of them for this, but neither one of us contacted one another, so I just did my own.


My Muslim brothers and sisters...

LOOK AT WHAT YOU'VE DONE!! You own a pair of eyes/
how do you expect to enter paradise when you do nothin' but terrorize?/
Care to try and explain yourselves? Spare your lies!/
Wanna be good Muslims? Cherish life/
you parasites are the reasons I'm stereotyped-/
as bein' a terrorist, cuz of me and my heritage/
too afraid to say our greetings in Arabic/ (Assalamu alaikum)
cuz I may be seen as a heretic/
to the point where I'm in need of a therapist/
or else I might beat up Americans!/
cuz now we're cheated out of our freedoms and treated unfairly/ (Is this what you wanted?)
I DON'T GOT SHIT TO DO WITH THIS!!/
these accusations stick like glue and it's sick and ludicrous!/
Fuck it, you wanna stick to rudiments? Let's stick to rudiments/
Skip the Q and A's! On a trip to U.S.A. I'mma get gratuitous/
hit the stewardess; kick her uterus, strip her, and fit into her dress/
come out, yellin' "hip, hip hooray" as I wave a pistol, holding up sixty tourists/
and have the plane help me with assisted suicide!/

lol Idk..


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Re: Terrorist

Postby Sam. » Jul 20th, '11, 11:22

fb link :unsure:
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Re: Terrorist

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 20th, '11, 17:53

MCSam wrote:fb link :unsure:


Right at the bottom. Look again.
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Re: Terrorist

Postby Sam. » Jul 20th, '11, 18:58

ArsheyHaq wrote:
MCSam wrote:fb link :unsure:


Right at the bottom. Look again.

does not work :coffee:
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Re: Terrorist

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 21st, '11, 05:40

*Sigh* Paste it after... http://forum.trshady.com/ ...and it'll work just fine.
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Re: Terrorist

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 21st, '11, 07:12

Ash....you're really exceptional....I love the internal/multi rhymes....crazy drop....I loved this and would love to see a full version, if there is more, of this. Bravo
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Re: Terrorist

Postby Sam. » Jul 21st, '11, 12:21

Fa-Q wrote:Ash....you're really exceptional....I love the internal/multi rhymes....crazy drop....I loved this and would love to see a full version, if there is more, of this. Bravo

tk the wrds st8 outta my mouth .
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Re: Terrorist

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 21st, '11, 14:19

MCSam wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:Ash....you're really exceptional....I love the internal/multi rhymes....crazy drop....I loved this and would love to see a full version, if there is more, of this. Bravo

tk the wrds st8 outta my mouth .

hahah the fuck? Did you text this? :laughing: :laughing:
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Re: Terrorist

Postby Sam. » Jul 21st, '11, 18:11

Fa-Q wrote:
MCSam wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:Ash....you're really exceptional....I love the internal/multi rhymes....crazy drop....I loved this and would love to see a full version, if there is more, of this. Bravo

tk the wrds st8 outta my mouth .

hahah the fuck? Did you text this? :laughing: :laughing:

i sd took :unsure:
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Re: Terrorist

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 22nd, '11, 03:04

Thanks, both of you.

Fa-Q, this is the full version...haha
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Re: Terrorist

Postby WakeUpShow » Jul 25th, '11, 19:34

Great internal rhyming and I really loved the transition from angry to basically sympathetic with the terrorists. Great technicalities and also awesome content because I have to admit I as an American, I stereotype all Muslims as terrorists haha. Another awesome Drop :y:

EDIT: Almost forgot. Beautiful Vocab! Nothing sounded forced.
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Re: Terrorist

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jul 25th, '11, 23:15

Great piece brah, as usual the multis & flow were completely on point. I love the concept switch of this, starting off peaceful & then turning crazy as it nears the end. I even enjoyed the content & message of this which is odd seeing as how i'm an ex-Muslim & all. I have nothing to criticize about this really, your style's great as it is.
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Re: Terrorist

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 26th, '11, 04:47

Cosh wrote:I have to admit I as an American, I stereotype all Muslims as terrorists haha.


Lol yeah, don't do that. One of the reasons I decided to make this piece, cuz I know a lot of that goes on.

Thanks though, Cosh and Venom, for finding the time to give me feedback. I'm glad you two enjoyed it as much as you did.
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Re: Terrorist

Postby BumShiv » Jul 26th, '11, 06:04

Damn bro I really liked this and is really true. I could only imagine how annoying it could be to be stereotyped like that. I always try to defend Muslim people who are being stereotyped like that. Great stuff :y: Please leave some feed on my beats :y:
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Re: Terrorist

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jul 27th, '11, 07:09

RecoveryEminem wrote:Damn bro I really liked this and is really true. I could only imagine how annoying it could be to be stereotyped like that. I always try to defend Muslim people who are being stereotyped like that. Great stuff :y: Please leave some feed on my beats :y:
http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic. ... 4&t=120210


Thanks for doing your part in social justice, RecoveryEminem :y: and of course, thanks for the feed. I wanted to give you feedback, but your link doesn't seem to be working.

Also, I think it's funny that no one pointed out to me that "tourist" and "suicide" don't rhyme lol
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