Confessions of an Emcee

[JamaicanPattlez]

Verse:
A terror in The Golden Era which was co-ruled by Farrah,
Was near a chosen error when it was out ruled to air a,
Rap song on the radio that had hoes screaming "Rape me, bro",
So lately we've tried to go bring back the 80's flow,
Ladies though can't take the flow and especially hate the smell of dro,
Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,
They don't listen to the words or verbs, they're just in heat with the beat,
Like a blurb from a nerd, you face defeat when you speak,
But emcees aim to please the both ladies and the Gs,
So we speak about weed, Hennessy, and our Enyce,
You see it's a tough battle, this rap shit makes your back hurt,
Words more intricate than math work can make us look like bastards,
It's sad though, cause then we face shit over our lyrics,
And then we worry about a fake bitch and how she got offended,
But that's the rap game, listen to the crap I'm saying,
And understand that not all rappers are mack and playing.



Hook:
Hip Hop's developed to where it is now,
With dudes acting thuggish and all I wonder is "how?"
Meanwhile these girls are dancing so sleazy,
And their only life goal now is to please me,
Can I even keep rapping, can I keep up with this shit?
Do I even wanna contribute to this by the way that I spit?
I'm not sure, but I'm gonna set shit straight,
Before this rap game gets old and then breaks.



So lemme know what you think of it so far. I haven't posted in a long time! Not sure if I improved or fell off yet, lmao. Comments and advice are welcome.

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[PeNGuiN ZoMbiE]

rhyming and flow were good and i loved the heat with the beat line haha cos its true. the beginning was kinda boring to me but picked up my interest a little after those few lines. not a bad read. my two pennies

[JamaicanPattlez]

rhyming and flow were good and i loved the heat with the beat line haha cos its true. the beginning was kinda boring to me but picked up my interest a little after those few lines. not a bad read. my two pennies

Thanks! Really? I thought the beginning was clever. Aw well, haha. Back to the pad I go. And well.. we ALL know about women and club beats, haha.

[PeNGuiN ZoMbiE]

the first few lines had great rhymes but just didnt interest me. maybe cos i dont know the background of it, maybe it was the presentation of it. i dont really know lol. but yesss woman + club beats = win haha

[JamaicanPattlez]

the first few lines had great rhymes but just didnt interest me. maybe cos i dont know the background of it, maybe it was the presentation of it. i dont really know lol. but yesss woman + club beats = win haha

Nah homie, 'sall good. I wonder if I can rework that if I have time later on. Idunno, lol. Women are to club beats is equal to how Nick Cannon is to Eminem haha.

[J.R.]

This was sick, bro. Work on it a bit and you'll be set.

[Ka0t1c]

hell yeah, that's cool, keep working on this piece

[JamaicanPattlez]

This was sick, bro. Work on it a bit and you'll be set.

Thanks man!

hell yeah, that's cool, keep working on this piece

I definitely will!

[ArsheyHaq]

This was fairly good. I liked it a lot Some lines had me saying, out loud, "woah, this is dope". I liked the beginning half more though, cuz I kind of don't relate to anything/don't know what you mean by the second half... But yeah, the first half was full of multies, one after another, so that was fun to read for me. I think you're dope, but I definitely wanna see more from you before I make up my mind about you hah Here's a few lines I though were raw:

"Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,"

"You see it's a tough battle, this rap shit makes your back hurt,
Words more intricate than math work"

[JamaicanPattlez]

This was fairly good. I liked it a lot Some lines had me saying, out loud, "woah, this is dope". I liked the beginning half more though, cuz I kind of don't relate to anything/don't know what you mean by the second half... But yeah, the first half was full of multies, one after another, so that was fun to read for me. I think you're dope, but I definitely wanna see more from you before I make up my mind about you hah Here's a few lines I though were raw:

"Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,"

"You see it's a tough battle, this rap shit makes your back hurt,
Words more intricate than math work"

Thank you. The beginning I felt was my strongest for me.

And Menzo, I'm down man. Haha should be fun!

[Sam.]

Gawd damn! that is a sick verse man ,really impressive ,what was really impressive is the punches that were put cleverly ,as mentioned earlier flow was a plus point of your verse keep at it .

[JamaicanPattlez]

A terror in The Golden Era which was co-ruled by Farrah,
Was near a chosen error when it was out ruled to air a,
Rap song on the radio that had hoes screaming "Rape me, bro",
So lately we've tried to go bring back the 80's flow,
Ladies though can't take the flow and especially hate the smell of dro,
Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,
They don't care about words or verbs, they're just in heat with the beat,
Like a blurb from a nerd, you get all meek when you speak,
But emcees aim to please the both ladies and the Gs,
So we speak about weed, Hennessy, and our Enyce,
You see it's a tough battle, this rap shit makes your back hurt,
Words more intricate than math work can make us look like bastards,
It's sad though, cause then we face shit over lyrics,
And then we worry about a fake bitch who went to go mirror it,
But that's the rap game, listen to the crap I'm saying,
That real talent lacks fame, and that we don't all mack and play.

Edited version! Thoughts? And thanks, Sam!

[Mr Change]

Great dude, really, you haven't fell off at all since the last piece of yours I read
It sounds soooooo natural when I read it, like most of it just rolls off the tongue

Specially like these parts;



Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,

They don't care about words or verbs, they're just in heat with the beat,

Short and clever


It's sad though, cause then we face shit over lyrics,
And then we worry about a fake bitch who went to go mirror it,

Love the face shit/fake bitch-lyrics/mirror it

[JamaicanPattlez]

Great dude, really, you haven't fell off at all since the last piece of yours I read
It sounds soooooo natural when I read it, like most of it just rolls off the tongue

Specially like these parts;



Ironic though that they hate smoke, when most of them just love to blow,

They don't care about words or verbs, they're just in heat with the beat,

Short and clever


It's sad though, cause then we face shit over lyrics,
And then we worry about a fake bitch who went to go mirror it,

Love the face shit/fake bitch-lyrics/mirror it

Thank you bro! Actually with the last part it's funny, became that one came to mind quick this time around, especially with the newer edits!