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Flying Too Close

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Flying Too Close

Postby EyeSpick » Aug 15th, '11, 01:54

I've been feeding audio people so I thought I'd post an old piece from back when I wrote.
I doubt anyone wants to read it all, so this isn't the entire piece.

(Verse)
I got a devil and a angel flippin coins for control of me
No voice in the matter, no choice in what I'll grow to be
But hopefully I'll get outta this town
Though the devil's sayin "Don't go, I want you around"
I have no soul to be found, I'm diggin holes in the ground
Floatin through clouds...but hell & heaven both let me down
(I'm not religious...)
I'm just using these symbols as figures of speech
God is fiction but these, decisions aren't in the least
I'm on my knees, with my hands pointed upwards see
I'm not prayin, got my feet cut out from under me
By drugs and booze, a young one, stunned & confused
I wanna be cool, and leave too, which one do I chose
I've seen how demons move... I've seen the evenin' news
Grew up with people who would love to get a piece of you
Won't be consumed by the small town life
So before I nod out, I pour my heart out & write

(Chorus x2)
Feels like I'm flying too close with wax wings
The sun's my escape from a town that trapped me
I walk the trapese, you can't stop my dreams...
I'm gonna bleed before I miss my chance to leave
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EminemBase wrote:Of course nothing is ever 100%, no questions asked absolute. We can't even prove we're not in fact living in a dream for example and aren't in fact the imaginations of some 'other selves' far far away. But that doesn't make the chances 50/50 like a fucking coin toss.
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Re: Flying Too Close

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 15th, '11, 02:29

great rhyming and great flow. Loved the use of internal rhyming and you kept it interesting. Hook could have flowed a bit better though.

Any way you could drop feed on my pieces "Ripped to Shreds" and "Feast of the Wolves". They're good I swear ;)
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Re: Flying Too Close

Postby EyeSpick » Aug 15th, '11, 18:59

Thanks for peeping it
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