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The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 26th, '11, 04:10

[HOOK 2x-COSH]
Biblical Horsemen, Out on a Mission
Mystical Forces, Bow to Tradition
Sex & Seduction, make sure the pain hurts
Death & Destruction, all in a day's work

[COSH]
If I see the face of death, I'll punch it in it's jaws of life
March against violence, but make sure to pause and fight
The Armageddon is at hand, Cosh is here to decimate
If you think we're friends we'll have a beer and set it straight
Death is your second fate, your first is a can of whoop-ass
I think you were led astray, I'll put you back on hell's foot path
One bad seed leads to a family tree full of rotten apples
2 black eyes after you had gotten grappled
Outlaw Equestrians riding into town square, weapons cocked
Hell is open, Heaven's locked. Hellish omens, Seven flocks.
There ain't no Pearly Gates....cause I've swallowed the key
Headed for an Early Grave.....If you're following me
Pull the wool over your eyes when I pack a pistol, BLAM!
If you're a wolf in sheep's clothing you're the sacraficial lamb!
I know you've led a tumultuous life
But if there's hell to pay, you'll pay the ultimate price

[HOOK 2x-COSH]
Biblical Horsemen, Out on a Mission
Mystical Forces, Bow to Tradition
Sex & Seduction, make sure the pain hurts
Death & Destruction, all in a day's work

[ARSHEYHAQ]
Apocalyptic texts foreshadowed how we'd drop bombs/
and put a plague on you, but to think you're more sick than Thou? You've thought wrong!/
your God's gone--worship the GROUND we walk on!/
The Four Horsemen, but we ain't horsin' around--we lock horns/
with your bull shit cuz you need your vertex examined/
we hungry, ate everyone in our path and left you cursed with a famine/
when it comes to inflicting hurt we're the champions/
it's our work on the planet, the earth is our canvas; behold our masterpiece!/
can't control our actions; we're cold and dastardly/
we mold disasters 'till the toll on casualties hits its full capacity/
'till every single one of your souls is fast asleep!/
we'll turn you to smolderin' ash while sippin' a Folgers glass of tea/ :coffee:
strollin' casually away from the whole catastrophe/ HAHA
too much momentum when Venom & Cosh roll with Class & me/
we get this shit on lock, Hell, we hold the master key!!!/



[HOOK 2x-COSH]
Biblical Horsemen, Out on a Mission
Mystical Forces, Bow to Tradition
Sex & Seduction, make sure the pain hurts
Death & Destruction, all in a day's work

[VENOM]
Yo I'm savage insane, I ravage the plains causing famine & plagues
Putting masses in graves, cleansing souls in acid rain
I'll question the precense of god in his face
Made the second john the saint reject all his faith
Ain't scared of another curse, i'll fuck mother earth with a rod of snakes
And have her serving me food for thought on tectonic plates
More young & restless in the grave the older I get
I'll turn a blind eye to the world & cause a solar eclipse
To get my rocks off there's boulders I lift
Won't get off my high horse till i'm stoned to death
Unplug your mic cord on your live tour
& choke your neck till you're a broken wreck
A great mind trapped inside of a brain-cell
Took the chariot of the gods for a joyride on the highway to hell
Hoping to meet the cousin when I sleep in a coffin
The flame won't burn out till I collapse from heat exhaustion

[HOOK 2x-COSH]
Biblical Horsemen, Out on a Mission
Mystical Forces, Bow to Tradition
Sex & Seduction, make sure the pain hurts
Death & Destruction, all in a day's work

[SENTUS]
This is a lyrical massacre with the illest of imagery
I’m killin ya infantry with this syllable symphony
You’ll be feelin the energy when all the work is done
Kickin asses and spittin acid with the serpents tongue
The earth is done when I arrive in horrid twisters
Covered in morbid blisters like one of the Gorgon sisters
When my forces hit ya you’ll cower and weep
Get down on a knee and worship the sound of the beat
The power I keep is unmatched by the darkest of all
The demons who are schemin for some carcass to gnaw
But I was feared, so they left me locked behind bars
And I sat, carvin my paws into the Tartarus walls
But I escaped…so it’s futile to try and hide
My rhyme book was first discovered on Mount Sinai
Now I sit atop my throne cloaked by the lion’s hide
Of the leader from the most violent pride

[HOOK 2x-COSH]
Biblical Horsemen, Out on a Mission
Mystical Forces, Bow to Tradition
Sex & Seduction, make sure the pain hurts
Death & Destruction, all in a day's work

Haq: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=122090
Venom: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=122034
Sentus: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=121075
Cosh: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=121272
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 26th, '11, 08:45

Dooooooope! :worship: I liked it a lot! Great job, you guys.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby VenomBlackViper » Aug 26th, '11, 13:41

JamaicanPattlez wrote:Dooooooope! :worship: I liked it a lot! Great job, you guys.


Thank you man :worship: :worship: :worship: I loved your feedback too, if I had to give feedback on your feedback i'd say your flow was great for the most part, the way you flowed "great job, you guys" instead of "good job, you guys" really shows how much of an accomplished feeder you really are.

Your rhyming was on point too, I caught that internal rhyme "I liked it a lot! Great job "

Now your delivery on the other hand you need to work on, you were a bit off beat with it especially during the " :worship: " portion, but then again you're new to recording so i'm sure you'll get the hang of it with time.

Favorite line:

"I liked it a lot! Great job, you guys."

Worst line:

"Dooooooope!"

not enough o's, could have used a few more exclamation points too.

Final rate: 4/5

BTW can you feed back my feedback of your feedback please? Would be much appreciated. :y:
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 26th, '11, 18:22

VenomBlackViper wrote:
JamaicanPattlez wrote:Dooooooope! :worship: I liked it a lot! Great job, you guys.


Thank you man :worship: :worship: :worship: I loved your feedback too, if I had to give feedback on your feedback i'd say your flow was great for the most part, the way you flowed "great job, you guys" instead of "good job, you guys" really shows how much of an accomplished feeder you really are.

Your rhyming was on point too, I caught that internal rhyme "I liked it a lot! Great job "

Now your delivery on the other hand you need to work on, you were a bit off beat with it especially during the " :worship: " portion, but then again you're new to recording so i'm sure you'll get the hang of it with time.

Favorite line:

"I liked it a lot! Great job, you guys."

Worst line:

"Dooooooope!"

not enough o's, could have used a few more exclamation points too.

Final rate: 4/5

BTW can you feed back my feedback of your feedback please? Would be much appreciated. :y:



Alright, alright, I can take a hint, lol. I was on my phone, but whatever. Anyway...

To start off, I really like the hook Cosh has. Not something I've really seen before (obviously) and I like it a lot.

Cosh: I noticed that part of the bars you have in there came from something that you had earlier and you took it down. It was a nice surprise to see. :y: You've stepped up rhyming a lot better (Or maybe you always did that?) and either way, awesome job to you. The flow was pretty good, I like it.

Arsheyhaq: First thing I noticed about your verse in this was the vocabulary. Very impressive.

with your bull shit cuz you need your vertex examined/
we hungry, ate everyone in our path and left you cursed with a famine/

That was my favorite part of your verse. :worship: I also laughed at the Folgers line too. Nice way of implementing the smiley. :laughing: Great job.

Now to you, Venom: Very impressive, not much I can really say to this!


A great mind trapped inside of a brain-cell
Took the chariot of the gods for a joyride on the highway to hell <- That part I liked, because I felt that it flowed well and just straight up impressive. Really good job! :y:

Last, but certainly not least is Sentus: There are so many good lines in here, it's not even funny.


This is a lyrical massacre with the illest of imagery
I’m killin ya infantry with this syllable symphony


The earth is done when I arrive in horrid twisters
Covered in morbid blisters like one of the Gorgon sisters


My rhyme book was first discovered on Mount Sinai
Now I sit atop my throne cloaked by the lion’s hide

Greatness. I really loved that verse. :y: Excellent job to all you guys. 4/5.

And feedback to my piece? viewtopic.php?f=24&t=123753 Greatly appreciated. :y:


Is that good? :sweating:
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby ArsheyHaq » Aug 27th, '11, 01:11

AHAHA You're crazy Venom. And thanks, JamaicanPattlez, for the feedback.

But really? No other feedback... We must have left 'em all speechless :smoking:
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Aug 27th, '11, 02:19

ArsheyHaq wrote:AHAHA You're crazy Venom. And thanks, JamaicanPattlez, for the feedback.

But really? No other feedback... We must have left 'em all speechless :smoking:


Lol to be honest I was just gonna brush that off, but then again it's feedback, so... yeah, haha. Either way, it's impressive. :y:
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby ArsheyHaq » Aug 27th, '11, 02:25

JamaicanPattlez wrote:
ArsheyHaq wrote:AHAHA You're crazy Venom. And thanks, JamaicanPattlez, for the feedback.

But really? No other feedback... We must have left 'em all speechless :smoking:


Lol to be honest I was just gonna brush that off, but then again it's feedback, so... yeah, haha. Either way, it's impressive. :y:


Noo lol I wasn't talking to you when I said the "no other feedback" thing. That's aimed to the rest of the forum.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 27th, '11, 16:07

holy shit, a masterpiece like this gets passed on while complete shit like ***** and ******, not to mention ************ get feedback.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby VenomBlackViper » Aug 27th, '11, 22:45

Cosh wrote:holy shit, a masterpiece like this gets passed on while complete shit like ***** and ******, not to mention ************ get feedback.


I think we need to switch our style up, it's not mainstream enough tbh.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 27th, '11, 23:35

VenomBlackViper wrote:
Cosh wrote:holy shit, a masterpiece like this gets passed on while complete shit like ***** and ******, not to mention ************ get feedback.


I think we need to switch our style up, it's not mainstream enough tbh.

yeah, maybe tone the rhyming and vocab down a bit. I might add some gun talk to mine.
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Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 28th, '11, 01:25

thanks, but you may be mistaken. the parts you underlined for me flowed flawlessly.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby Wreck » Aug 28th, '11, 01:59

This was fucking ill. Props.
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby ArsheyHaq » Aug 28th, '11, 19:19

Thanks for the feed, GameTheory. Very in-depth.

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Sick, sick, sick verse. Especially the part I've underlined, that made me say "Damn" outloud. The first bar didn't flow well for me though. But overall it's an awesome verse. You're a pro without a mic (unfortunately). :y:



Apocalyptic texts foreshadowed how we'd drop bombs/
and put a plague on you, but to think you're more sick than Thou? You've thought wrong!/
your God's gone--worship the GROUND we walk on!/
The Four Horsemen, but we ain't horsin' around--we lock horns/


I highlighted what should be rhymed with what/stressed more than other words. The multi begins with 'fore' and goes up to 'bombs'. Hope that helps you flow the first bar a little better :y:
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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby Wreck » Aug 28th, '11, 19:25

Cosh wrote:[VENOM]
Yo I'm savage insane, I ravage the plains causing famine & plagues
Putting masses in graves, cleansing souls in acid rain
I'll question the precense of god in his face
Made the second john the saint reject all his faith
Ain't scared of another curse, i'll fuck mother earth with a rod of snakes
And have her serving me food for thought on tectonic plates
More young & restless in the grave the older I get
I'll turn a blind eye to the world & cause a solar eclipse
To get my rocks off there's boulders I lift
Won't get off my high horse till i'm stoned to death
Unplug your mic cord on your live tour
& choke your neck till you're a broken wreck
A great mind trapped inside of a brain-cell
Took the chariot of the gods for a joyride on the highway to hell
Hoping to meet the cousin when I sleep in a coffin
The flame won't burn out till I collapse from heat exhaustion


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Re: The Four Horsemen feat. Sentus, VBV, and ArsheyHaq

Postby VenomBlackViper » Aug 29th, '11, 00:47

GameTheory wrote:Awesome verse as usual, flow was really great but the "stoned to death" rhyme made a stain on it imo. Lyrically it was that gangsta/demonic shit you always do. I don't have another criticism to this verse but I have a criticism in general - Every verse of yours basically is about this (Maybe minus the EyeQ feature), not saying it's bad, just saying you should do more concepts/topic, nahmean? Great verse


That stoned to death line is an AB-AA-BB scheme:

Won't get off my high horse till i'm stoned to death
Unplug your mic cord on your live tour
& choke your neck till you're a broken wreck

As for my subject matter, well yeah, I don't take writing seriously enough to actually try being innovative & shit at this point. I've written part of 1 emotional song & even that could be considered horrorcore since it's about killing my entire family. For the most part my writing consists of thinking of clever punchlines & turning them into bars.
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