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Freeze, This Is A Stick Up!

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Freeze, This Is A Stick Up!

Postby ArsheyHaq » Aug 24th, '11, 07:53

This is a keystyle just for fun. I could honestly care less about feedback. Just read it and enjoy, ya'll!


You think that you're all alone, and you prolly don't-/
even know that you were being followed home/
'till a solid chrome bat smashes your collar bones/
and I steal enough dollars out of your wallet to pay all of my college loans/
so drop and give me 50...BUCKS! I ain't no drill sergeant/
and hurry! Unless you want your killed carcass wrapped in a silk carpet/
and your face on tomorrow's milk cartons/
pussy, now the only time you'll feel hard's when you're dead with rigor mortis!/
but shit, I'm gettin' hard just lookin' at your chick, "You're gorgeous!/
I'll eat that ass right here on the kitchen floor, bitch/
it's as good as done--stick a fork 'n it/
my dick's enormous, and your pussy's tight so what's crackalatin'?/
You look attractive, baby/
let's dip, I got more whips than the backs of blacks back in slavery/
nahhhhh, I'm just actin' crazy/
but seriously, I'm hot as shit--Satan sent me a batch of daisies/
so I killed Patrick Swayze and told his 'Ghost' to take 'em back to Hades/
cuz I play hard to get, but my dick's as hard as shit!/
So let's fuck and just save time/
wait a minute, wait a minute! Did everything I just say rhyme?? :o /..cool"







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Re: Freeze, This Is A Stick Up!

Postby ArsheyHaq » Aug 27th, '11, 00:54

Stay thirsty, my friends :y:
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Re: Freeze, This Is A Stick Up!

Postby PeNGuiN ZoMbiE » Aug 27th, '11, 21:56

lol there is so much filler in this just for the sake of the rhyme haha
and you talked about your dick and its hardness twice lmao

and also stealing someones money and then telling them to give you 50 dollars is kinda dumb and doesnt really make sense

...just figured id critic it like a thought out song :y:
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Re: Freeze, This Is A Stick Up!

Postby WakeUpShow » Aug 27th, '11, 22:11

PeNGuiN ZoMbiE wrote:lol there is so much filler in this just for the sake of the rhyme haha
and you talked about your dick and its hardness twice lmao

and also stealing someones money and then telling them to give you 50 dollars is kinda dumb and doesnt really make sense

...just figured id critic it like a thought out song :y:

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