Son of Mewtwo

[Lateralus]

Feedback: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=123726&start=15

Basically just a free verse with no real theme. Just fucking around really.

They call me cuckoo, born in the caves of Zulu
A baby spawned, loved and raised by Mewtwo
Wearing devil horns and a lady's tutu
Claiming to be trained in the ways of voodoo
That crazy dude who's just a little demented
Me and Tom Riddle went on a bit of a bender
Whipped out our wands and started killing Dementors
Honing our Patronus skills with a vengeance
My psych was a man sized Ritalin vendor
An educated man with a hidden agenda
So I, stuck a kitten's placenta in a blender
And fed the remnants to his kid on the 25th of December
Meeeeerry Christmas, bitch! Chris is vicious
The Grinch is on a mission to twist your wishes
I switched your gift list with a masochist kid's
So Santa's come to town to give your dick some stitches
It's sick and twisted how I string these words together
It gets better with every perverted letter
You'll never catch me, you see, this nerd is clever
Using his disturbing verses as murder weapons
I'll curse the Earth til it turns to a nervous wreck
And flies into the Sun, preferring to burn to death
And while the Universe's globes are mourning
I'll laugh and crack a joke about global warming.

[Man1x]

Nice! Good first piece on hear, you know the concept of multis so I'd expand past two syllables and try 3-4. Also, you may want to get some subject matter instead of random ideas, I do understand that you were just fucking around though so that doesn't matter.

[WakeUpShow]

^majority of the rhymes were 4+ syllables, Eminemeny.

On-Topic, this was awesome! I loved your transistions from one scheme to another. It was flawless and made the flow incredible. You're great with rhyming and I love how you had moments of humor throughout. Drop more!

[Man1x]

^majority of the rhymes were 4+ syllables, Eminemeny.

On-Topic, this was awesome! I loved your transistions from one scheme to another. It was flawless and made the flow incredible. You're great with rhyming and I love how you had moments of humor throughout. Drop more!

Oh, now that I look at I see the 4+, sorry just tired. Wow I feel retarded.

[Blu]

Oh fuck!! This was fire man. The first couple lines got me hooked instantly and I couldn't stop rapping!! That's the type of shit I like. Where I just throw into the rap.

It flowed really well, like Cosh said.
I really have nothing to add man but this was just a solid piece.

Feed me, man.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Damn! I was hooked on reading and rapping this out! Loved it man. I can't really add anything either. Feed me back? viewtopic.php?f=24&t=124226

[Lateralus]

Thanks for the feedback, fellaz!

[Sam.]

I must say your rhyming is outstanding ,the way the inner multis connected were pretty much like how a pro would do ,cleverly put indeed . The imagination was good ,it took me a minute to get some lines so i had to read this a couple of times ,but all is well though .

One of the best thing is you manged to keep the whole thing well organized and interesting also ,i liked that ,not many people do so .

But one thing man i gotta tell the vocab on this is mind blowing .

Keep at it bro .

[Sam.]

Care to Return the Feed Bro .
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[mdemaz]

The fact this song references Pokemon makes it immediately awesome.